The emotions of mine are jumping
Trampling each one marking its way
Leaving footprints covering my heart
As the black explodes by the red light shining through
Breaking up any lie, for the truth of love
I could only lie about the pain I'm in
When really your the only one for me
I have carved your face on my heart
Each of the facial description glows as I see you
But I know this is only a lie, you and me
Only wanting the impossible will create anger
The touch of yours will only make me run
When the truth is I only love you
Author notes
....about a guy oviously lol
Written December 2nd, 2004
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great
great poem. thanks for the comment. merry christmas to you to!
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But I know this is only a lie, you and me
Only wanting the impossible will create anger
Only the touch of yous will make me run
When the truth is I only love you
This part made the whole poem for me. I wasn't too crazy about the begining, but this ending I fell in love with. It explains something I am feeling right now. The begining almost seemed like you had to force it out, something you really had to try hard to make it come out the way it did. Maybe I am crazy, that is just the way it seemed. But for some reason, I loved the end.
oh yeah, the line 'Only the touch of yous will make me run', you should change that 'yous' to 'yours' or even better maybe even make that part read like this 'your touch will only make me run'. Something like that to make it flow better.
Edited on Dec 04, 3:01 p.m. because ''. -
awwww this is reallt bittersweet
your write is very enjoyable
i loved this part
"Breaking up any lie, for the truth of love
I could only lie about the pain I'm in
When really your the only one for me"
sometimes that's is the hardest part to admit
asg
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