perfect day
spoken vows
untested innocence
Author notes
Written December 1st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- The Wedding/Wedding Anniversary Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended August 6, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is Very Beautiful ~
I love the Ku' you have presented,
but as a Judge for many high profile contests on AP, I can
not go in and edit this contest to allow another Ku' of a different count
than what was asked for in the contest rules.....5-7-5 ~
I'm sooo sorry ~
However, Loved your entry ~
Please join me in the next Poetry Formed Contest ~
Love your talent and magical Quill ~
Bear ~
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That's okay. I am glad you enjoyed it. I suppose I missed the contest you mentioned eh? Well, keep me posted to your next one. Duana
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Lovely haiku, Duana, and I love the metaphor of the test of innocense at the threshold/gate of marriage.
Thank you so much for this wonderful entry to the contest!
Jo
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It is a perfect day, and the image of the gate enhances you lovely haiku. This conjures up many thoughts and ideas, well done!
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"untested innocence" Hmm. So many ideas come up with this one. Perhaps marriage. Maybe consummating a marriage. Maybe innocence is truly perfection? Reallllly good!
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This is beautiful
I got married in Feb not many roses that pretty in bloom that time of year, except well for Valentines, in a nursery
Love it and do come see me
Hugs
Susan~~~
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No you aren't making it too complicated. You are headed in the right direction...
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I caught your comment about being a warning. Is that why you have the Picture of the Gate, and the line of untested innocence. could the meaning be that you'll never know until you go through the experience? Hmmm I think I'm making it to complicated. that's why I like Haiku's complex simplicity.... Red
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awww this was so sweet, and bautiful..its like the image of the gate signifies unopened territories and unventured immorality..gret job. i loved this :0)
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There is also a flash of warning in ot to those who haven't experienced it, but I don't think people are picking up on that for some reason....maybe most people don't get married when they are as naive as I was
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I love this, it speaks volumes. A perfect moment.
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Wow all around!! Love the picture and the haiku! Innocence is very precious, indeed!
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wow what a picture ! the verse speaks of matrimony and so also does the picture. Really great !
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Exquisite!!!
Very beautiful, Duana. As long as the innocence is not tested it remains the same. Testing leads to vulnerability and also strength.
Love from India - Joel - -
Very Good
A wedding of thoughts and innocence. This piece brings back all kinds of fabulous memories to this old man's brain. Thanks for the flash back. Keep up the great writing. Take care and God bless.
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lovely image of ??? a marriage but it has a deeper level perhaps a spiritual significance well done and i can see why you saved this for the assignment ~ col
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This is so sweet and tender. I was married outside beneath an arch way very simular to this. I love it!!
Your words and the picture they paint. The photo as well.
Sam
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thoughtful
I think I am going to have to re-read this one a few more times. I jumped to the obvious meaning and now have to see if there might be others I am missing.
This ought to keep my mind busy for part of the day.
thanks,
John -
NICE WRITE HERE
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Yep! Well put, well done!
~ G
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Very clever haiku Duana!
It is sad when innocence is gone, and it's worse as innocence has never been there (one of the two will get very mad then lol).
Well done!
Kisses,
Mari
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nice
Sweet fairy tale picture perfect white picket fence -
lol. Yes. I agree. I wasn't really thinking about the bride and groom doubting each other....otherwise it wouldn't be a perfect day....yes it's innocence, and it will be tested over the years....
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Let's just believe in that innocence for this one day... Though untested, you still refer to it as innocence, thereforeit is innocence. To the reader anyways. The bride and the groom can doubt each other all they want.
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And yet ironically..the whole day is a double meaning isn't it...'untested innocence'?
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Mmm. I recognize the picture
But the haiku is new to me - did you write a different one for this picture. In any case, it is lovely. I love how you include words with innocent and pure connotations into this wedding haiku, so there is no doubt, no words with double meanings, just the purity and clarity of love... The title also adds to the haiku, even though technically the title isn't supposed to explain the haiku (or whatever the rule was). Ahhh. This makes me want to get married and have a perfect white wedding with all the purity of true love.
Great job, Duana!
~Anastasia
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