Who the hell are you?
To say life
is precious,
and not mine to end?
Must be quite easy
for you to say,
absorbed in your illusory world
with that ignorant smile
glued to your face.
Am I supposed to pretend to be
happy
for you?
I can give it a try
if you will feel
empty
for me.
Author notes
I stumbled onto this when looking through old notepad files. It was unfinished, but I liked what I had written so I finished it. It's directed to those who don't "believe" in depression, who haven't experienced it, and who don't understand that desperate hopelessness and hollow feeling that causes one to want to die. It's for those people, who expect you to fake it for their comfort, and dare to call you selfish for wanting to be at peace.
Ironically, I'm feeling very good now. This was like looking back on a photo album of darker times.
Written December 1st, 2004
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Very valid and understandable piece with a real literal and focussed agenda alive within it's spirit. Well done and hats off to your writing. Tony.
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Excellent, excellent, excellent write here my friend. Although it was very short, I really enjoyed the amount of feelings and emotion you managed to capture in such a brief passage. I completely understand what depression is all about as I have been diagnosed with bi-polar diorder and have been feeling the effects for nearly 9 years now. It is a completely empty and hollow feeling, and nobody understands how difficult the most simple of tasks are on a daily basis. I'm glad you took the time to write this and give a perspective as to what one feels (or doesn't/can't feel) when faced with the tribulations that come with being depressed. Keep up the great work. Peace Out ~ Will
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i liked this poem because i could relate to it- i, too, have gone through times of depression and had suicidal tendencies... your poem is actually a pretty good reflection of what i used to feel about people who would try to get me to just 'snap out of it'. i guess they just don't know the way a person who is truly depressed feels about life and their experiences. it's almost impossible to fake it for more than a little while... i liked the lines-
“absorbed in your illusory world
with that ignorant smile
glued to your face.”
i'm glad that you're not feeling like that anymore, and have found a way to move on. best of wishes in life, and keep writing!
~tyler
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This would make an amazing verbal lash out to people who think loneliness and well, depression, is a curse. I've had mood swings and not depressions, but I don't think people are not capable of it and just self-inflict it. It's very honest.
Keep writing
Kannika -
Yea, i like this. This is great Ark. It's like saying fuck you for thinking you're better. I don't think anyone is any better than the next person, and those people who act like they are just irritate the hell out of me. I just want to smack em and say well i guess I was wrong I AM better than YOU bc I dont think this way, rotf jk. I don't
But I like this. A lot of short poems I dont like bc you cant really get a lot of emotion out. It is harder bc you have to use the right words bc It's just too short, but this was short and powerful, which those kind of short poems I don't mind a bit
great job
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well done!! glad to finished it!!
this is great ark,very direct and honest,i hated that,i would feel all down,and everyone around me didn't care they were all suck it up and live life and i was like i'mn tryin but it's hard to be happy,most people that never have depression just don't get it,i hate bein judged,but i feel pretty great anymore,but i member back to dark times,and nobody was there for me,and it sucked!!! great poem,keep up the good work,very impressive as usual,you rock!!! nbf
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Okay... wow... lemme get this to sink in a bit.... this is so friggin awesome no words can describe it... people tell me constantly to be happy, to smile, etc etc and ya know, it's like why don't they take a chance in my shoes and they see how much it hurts to be me! totally friggin awesome, I can't put to exact words what I think about this but it's just awesome. Bravo hun
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this is a great piece my friend.....then ending is just awesome....something i'd like to tell a few people that i know. i too don't understand how one cannot "believe" in depression when we are constantly surrounded by it
doesn't make any sense! what do they think....we just make the shit up? Like oh hey, I think I'll try being suicidal for a day, or how about playing with a razorblade, I think i'll see what it feels like to doubt my very own existance, just for the hell of it! bleh, simple minded fucks.....ok, sorry i know i'm rambling now, lol, this piece just got me thinking....so anyway, yes, i really like this piece!
sweetdemise
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how cann you NOT "believe" in depression... you see it everywhere... its something you cant escape basically.... nice poem its really awesum. and very true.
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