Dear Mother Nut, Goddess of the Sky,
Arching o'er Earth, from the heavens so high
Whispering important messages, in my ear,
You make me feel precious, and truly so dear!
Starting my day, the Sky Queen Way,
Is truly wonderful, with tensions at bay
Imagining that, on soft green lawns, I lay
The tension in my muscles, just melts away!
Beautiful Goddess, of the day and the night,
Your beauty is perfection, in all its might
Slender and graceful, You are ultra-divine,
Peace-loving beauty, of the heavens pristine!
Striking lightning, and thunderstorms sometimes,
Seems like, You're playing with windchimes
Animating 'em, with cosmic energy,
Yet keeping the heavens, in perfect harmony!
Oh Dearest Goddess, How do you do this all?,
Making no mistake, be it spring or fall
Whenever to the heavens, me You do call,
I'll sit in Your lap, and watch this all!
In a list
A contest entry
- The Mysteries of Egypt by Bosiarbooger by Bosiarbooger.
2250 points, ended January 27, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great job
well written ode thanking and praising for ones servitude. Best of luck to you and thankyou for entering -
well done indeed
a wonderful prayer to the Goddess
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Thank you so much, Aine!
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Thank you very much, belovediceni
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Thank you, Lady
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Wonderful write. I really enjoyed it. Inspiring, and you really go into how she make you feel. Keep up the great work & Good luck in my contest.
Blessed Be & Brightest Blessings,
Sarah AKA LadyDragonWolfe -
wonderful poem
I love the finisher about sitting in Her lap, that was adorable! Everything about this poem was sweet and lovely. Another gorgeous tribute to another wonderful Goddess. I am so glad I found you and your awesome, fabulous poetry!
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Thank You so much!
Blessings in abundance to you too!!!
Charishma -
This is very diffrent then any of the other poems I have read so far. But wonderfully written.
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Thank you very much, Tina
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Lovely poem full of passion. Other than "divine/pristine" I thought the rhymes were really well done. Overall a beautiful, enjoyable poem. Thanks for entering.
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Thank you
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Another wonderful write You really have a way with words! Thanks for entering this in the contest.
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Excellent sense of rhythm, flow and good rhymes (not cliched or obvious). My only suggestion would be use commas less often, as they could interrupt the flow if a reader really pauses with each one. But if you use them for emphasizing certain phrases, that's a good thing. "Your playing with windchimes" should be "You're" as in "you are" although if you'd said "your playing with windchimes animates them" it would have fit too.
Please forgive my editorial remarks, I sometimes take this too seriously but I really mean no offense. This was truly beautiful. -
dua netjeret em enj (may the goddess bless you) for this wonderful poem.
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Thank you very much. I am happy you liked it.
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Brilliant job. this flowed very well and you stayed true to your topic throughout, this was a pleasant surprise. thanx for sharing...peace
Edited on Jan 12, 10:22 p.m. because ''.
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