Starry nights
bright lights
hugging tightly
never lonely
dancing slowly
gracefully enchanted
feeling wanted
rarely tainted
slanted view of
purple hue
can't be blue
so what's new?
Eyes like dew
no surprise
always wise
no tragic lies
perfectly sized.
Skin so smooth
a catchy groove
slyly move into camera frame
secret advances all look the same
He's thinking "Women shouldn't be so tame"
some think fame is past it's prime
rings aloud like bell towers chime
stagnant smell like forgotten crime
"Gee how swell. You look so well."
Retail gives it the hard sell
and celebrity hearts all do melt
as velvet curtain comes unfurled
on movie love in Hollywood's world.
Author notes
Nothing special. Was driving to work the other day after watching an overdone Hollywood romance, listening to Eminem and wondering how to combine them. Hollywood old skool, or something.
Written November 30th, 2004
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I'm sure I've already used this term with your poetry, but it seemed under a strobelight to me. It was hypnotic, rythmaticly choppy, amazing. The words smacked me down and the rythm smacked me repeatedly in the face! AMAZING! I love it!
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I get the sense that this poem would be better appreciated by listening to it being read, rather than reading it on the page. I can almost seem to get the rhythm and flow of the words as I read it here...but I think I'm missing something. Tricky stuff to get a silent reader to "hear" the rhythm and emphasis of words. Of course, that opens up the age-old debate...should poetry be read silently to one's self, or listened to??
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it made me laugh
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I guess I’ve heard an A rap, a good rap, a dapper rap… and now we have a B rap a lesser rap a down beat a weak street… but out there is so much C rap, you know that, it’s mad cap it’s C rap!
Sorry – not a great raponteur… I have often tried for a beat poem but so far it’s always beaten me… I thought yours was coming close though…
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lol I like this, shows in a way how pathetic it is to try and live up to the hollywood world. you've caught the whole movie atmosphere perfectly though and the rhyme helps with the flow.
nice work
love Sophie
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