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Gaze
at you- the daydreams roll
sorry
what did you say? (nothing)
good bye
sweet dream, I'm back on earth
Silence
in your eyes it holds me
sorry
I didnt mean to lose my breath
good bye
I've lost my chance to smile
Speak
why is it so hard for me?
sorry
these emotions have got me lost
good bye
you always look but never stay...
Love
it is such a silly game
sorry
I don't mean to be so sudden
good bye
You are my favorite stranger
Hate
why does it comes so quick?
sorry
didn't mean to use such words
good bye
I can never manage...
~
I smile
your faces are so sweet
You look away
I caught you in your gaze
close my eyes
I let the moment sink in...
~
Hello
is just another random gesture
sorry
I didnt mean to bother you
goodbye
I hope our eyes meet again
***
Author notes
Basically, I'm love-drunk.
Hope you enjoy the poem....
♥ christina
Written November 28th, 2004
A contest entry
- I want your best by sad angel 777.
300 points, ended May 29, 2005, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very cutely written .Yes its creative and unique ,I love the hesitant gaps and the shy smiles in between .Goodluck Anyways
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Truly Amazing
WOW this is very amazing I like it alot you have done an awesome job on this. I so hope to read more of your talented writing. Thank you so much for sharing this with my family and I. The last lines are my fav.
I smile
your faces are so sweet
You look away
I caught you in your gaze
close my eyes
I let the moment sink in...
~
Hello
is just another random gesture
sorry
I didnt mean to bother you
goodbye
I hope our eyes meet again -
The choppy feeling brings to surface the chopped emotions-- it was a good use. You did well with driving your emotions thoroughout this piece. Well written!!! Good luck in the contest.
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good luck in tha contest
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Since you are promoting this poem, I am so curious to know if you ever connected with him???This is a very nice song for a hopeful new love. Let me know how things worked out!
ZZZZZ
Linda
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This has its own vagrant charm. Good luck with the relationship.
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wow, this is so cute! love the style this is written in- especially the first stanza. excellently written, and thanks for entering the contest. this has been a pleasure to read.
Jen -
Awww! I know what you mean! I've definitely felt this way a few times, though some of it, I admit, was foolish on my part. What an excellent way to describe that feeling! But don't apologize for how this person makes you feel...it's a beautiful thing if you give it a chance! Thanx for commenting and good luck with this guy!
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Wow, this is so teenage romance flick, in the best way possible. the instantaneous flow of simple emotions triggered by a look and a gesture, things we can give too much meaning to sometimes, I have had this one too many times over the same person, I'm sorry to say. This is wonderful..
Keep writing
Kannika -
Great Poem!!!!
I really like the way you have this poem worded, its so unique, but so unique I feel in love with it!!!! I love it!!!! I am quite happy for you, and your crush!!! I hope it goes farther than just a smile~ Great Write anyway!!!!
~deamon
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