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Shivering In The Rain

Slowly it pours
Heaven’s tears falling
Into open sores
Vulnerability calling
Every drop of rain
Rinsing away
Intolerable pain
Nixing life’s dismay
Glistening anew

I look up to the sky
Naked and true

Tears whistling by
Heaven’s arms reach out
Enlightening my mind

Releasing any doubt
Angel’s eyes I find
Instilling love in my heart
Never again to fall apart

Author notes

Well, this is what came to mind when I was thinking of weather...it is about how heaven's tears (rain) are falling down and kind of cleanse your soul making you see in a new light and erasing away the pain you once held...
something along those lines  Hope it makes sense!
Written November 29th, 2004

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  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    April 1, 2005
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    This is absolutely gorgeous! I love the rain, it can have a calming effect on me (and on the flip side--either sleepy, depressed, or horny as hell--and it's especially horrid when there isn't a damn thing I can do about it! ) I don't know how I missed this, but it's so pretty...I will have to start experimenting with acrostics soon, you've gotten so good at them, but I can't seem to do them to save my life

    Also--the background is absolutely gorgeous, I'm stealing it!

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • ShaShay
    March 8, 2005
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    Great job. I felt cold when I read it... Keep up with your writings, I see better things with each new write.
    ~~~POO~~~


  • raspberry Greeters member
    March 8, 2005
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    This is a very good idea of poetry.. fine work.. Keep it up.. have a good day. raspberry


  • Samplette gold member
    February 23, 2005
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    You know how I adore acrostics. This one is no exception. It is so well written, and worth reading over again.
    S♥m


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    November 30, 2004
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    Beautiful poem! The way it read was just amazing, it flowed just like a river of raindrops, coming together so perfectly. Great job! Keep it up!

  • Dr John Celes
    November 30, 2004
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    good work

    beautiful acrostic! but I do not know what is Nixing. Otherwise, it has been quite well composed and itelligible.good work.


  • -Reality-
    November 30, 2004
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    When I was little I use to say that God's angels were crying when it rained, and that they were happy when it was sunny . A beautiful acrostic, Lo0opy Thank you for sharing

    Write on, stay strong
    Kami

  • this is love
    November 30, 2004
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    Ooh. I like this alot. Great work. I love reading your poems. =)

    xxx


  • Sandygram silver member
    November 29, 2004
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    AMAZING POEM

    Congratulations on your silver, this was a wonderful poem and deserved to be one of the winners. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy


  • angelica silver member
    November 29, 2004
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    congratulations on your silver trophy~angelica


  • Samplette gold member
    November 29, 2004
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    Very nicely done acrostic. I like the imagery and the overall feel. Thank you so much for entering.
    Sam

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