So much value,
human worth based upon color
Some never mindful,
not caring of another
Ah, to choose to be a color
sadly in reality there is no choice
Here in this land you say I get to choose,
then this is my color, my voice
I choose to be clear,
a color, yet transparent
I am therefore akin to all,
although to some it is not apparent
True, different colors do give diversity
then again, they also provoke animosity
To all be clear, transparent a wondrous new view
it is indeed still a color but without defining hue
(c)2004
~Nikki~
Author notes
Hello to all! I am usually the controversial one so I just had to do this piece. Now I realize some will argue that my choice is no color BUT I say it is. Look through a window or a piece of saran wrap. Yes, they are clear, transparent...can be seen through...BUT let your eyes adjust and you will notice a very slight hue. Color as with beauty is indeed in the eyes of the beholder!
Written November 26th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Finding YOUR Color (CONTEST) by Venessa.
400 points, ended November 29, 2004, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I think you have brought up a very interesting idea here. It would be nice to be transparent, because there would be no more you are this, you are that, we would all be whatever we wanted to be, not just one thing. Some people might say that this would mean that we would be conforming to one standard ideal, but that is not necessarily true. To be transparent would mean there is no color so we would not all be separated, there would be nothing to judge upon.
Sadly this is not possible and if taken on as something humanity wished to achieve it would only turn into something that would make most wars look like chicken-play, because inevitablely someone would turn it into a issue dealing with race, with sexuality, with anything and everything you could possibly imagine.
It would create chaos, because our differences are really our benifits, diversity is what sets us apart from everything else, it makes us an individual, so if we all looked the same, then maybe we would all think the same and talk the same and love the same and then what would the point be in being alive, there would be nothing to existance but comformity.
I don't see this as a reflection upon you obviously, these are just my thoughts on what the world would be like if we were all identical. In my opinion I think it would be the greatest disaster to ever happen to our species, because nature is built on difference, with everything working towards the same purpose it takes away all meaning and balance.
much love,
James
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Aha! Awsome hehe I thought this would be almost acrostic but I was suprised to find better! A definate rhythmic piece without rhyme and given plenty into meaning and reality. *grins*
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stands up and applauds This is an wonderful piece, a powerful perspective and one I agree with totally. Transparent is as it should be, for the skin is just the wrapping of the soul inside and that soul is indeed colorless as well as timeless. Awesome piece my dear. Blessings, Gypsy
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this is a unique concept and a unique write
I enjoyed reading this
well done
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This was a great write. I loved the message inside the message. You are right.....color gives diversity and anomosity. Great write. Simply fabulous poet.....scribble on.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
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Again great write. This the fourth time I have visited this poem...because I like it.
Bily -
So many as myself work their whole life to be less transparent yet here you are expressing that you want to be truely transparent. Interesting choice. I think you pulled it off well. Thank you so much for entering and good luck.
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what a beautiful way to obtain true balance and love. you always convey words so beautifuly and full of hope, insperation and love
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Nikki,
I liked your perception on color… I’m a color blind … it was only yesterday I was joking with my colleagues that if I ever suffer from Jaundice, I won’t be able to tell from my color b’cause I’m a color blind…lol… I really respect your views and you’ve been bravo to pen this…
True, different colors do give diversity
then again, they also provoke animosity
These are my favorite lines….I agree with you whole heartedly… Good luck in the contest…
mina
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I really wished everybody thought about it that way. I couldnt have said it better. That is a really great poem.
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i would much rather be a rainbow...a beautiful blend of all that is beautiful...for we all are...in our lovely shades and hues...one of the things that makes the world a more lovely palette of diversity.
UB
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This is so thoughtprovoking....just the thought of being transparent can branch out into so many other ways. Just imagine , we could see the heart and soul, and therefore maybe the good or bad intentions of a person. We might be able to see right thriugh a lie ...we could see someone elses pain and act appropriately and maybe comfort that person . I am a "peoplewatcher" anyway and I generally se or meet someone and wonder what they are all about....what there life is like etc....etc ,Of course their private life could not be seen , as it is lived behind closed doors and therefore they still could keep their anonymity , but we as a society could become so much more aware and we would see our similarities rather than our differences Excellent write and excellent idea.....best of luck with this very worthy write
zzzzzzz
Reenie
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Wow....What can I say. This poem stirred a lot of emotions in me. Its a beautiful write and it has all the elements of a great poem but what I feel is the most important part of your poem is the message your trying to send.
Now dont get me wrong...I may not agree with your view but I feel your heart is in the right place and thats what counts.
I know all too well about color. My step children are of three different races (white, black and Native American)and I am white but I live on a native reservation.
I love the color of my skin as do my kids. I understand your frusteration on not wanting to have the stigma of color but unfortunately we dont have that choice. I love my differences as do my children yet we are a very loving family and we take pride in our own heritage.
I guess what I am trying to say is that love is blind...especially color blind.....at least thats my vision.
Again excellant job and topic.
Billy -
Excellent piece! Transparency shows 'true' colors! You are an original! Great job!
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I don't find this controversial at all...Transparent is indeed a color...If you want to order glass, they list colors of "transparent, smoked, grey, black-out" and more...Who is to say "what" is really a color?? It is true, color and beauty is in the eye of the beholder...Think of the color blind who see the whole world differently than the rest...Are they to be criticized for their vision?? Your write had meaning and was penned very well...I think you did a great job...I haven't read the rest of the writes but if someone chose Black or White, technically they are not "colors" and yet, they are...Your line "human worth based upon color" means something special to me...Nearby they are having trouble with fights between the "Bloods" and the "Crypts" which are gangs who wear "red" and "blue" respectively...Sometimes a transparent world where people aren't judged by color would be nice...As always your writing evokes deep thought...Well worth the read...Good luck in the contest!
Victoria Lin
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