In the black velvet sky
Stars light the night
And I close my eyes
As I begin to dream of you
In an ocean of white cotton
Your eyes flash liquid
Pools of amber green
Drowning my soul
Though I’ve never
Held your hand
Or kissed your lips
You hold my heart
In a tidal wave
Of swirling emotion
I catch my breathe
And dive back in
In these dreams
I could swim forever
Breathing you in
Satisfied
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Written November 26th, 2004
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this is so beautiful! couldn't have imagined that love has so many more hallways to explore!
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Ohh I love the feel that this piece offers... very heart touching!!! I think I've spent much of my time in such dreams.. maybe too much time LOL... This is so very sweet and touching Anna...a most beautiful read!!
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this poem i sso beautiful! I love the way you use the ocean throughout the poem to relay your message so much more. In a tidal wave
Of swirling emotion
I catch my breathe
And dive back in
Powerful lines, i feel this poem, awsoem write.
-pasti -
Well done!
You have such a talent for expressing and for writing. it is a joy to come and read your works. I truly enjoyed this:
"In a tidal wave
Of swirling emotion
I catch my breathe
And dive back in"
That's so true in what we need to do... keep diving Thank you so much for sharing this 
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I love the romantic thoughts you have written about someone you have not yet touched (or may not have seen yet in person). Very nicely done!
<3 Maureen
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Lovely work...
Hugs...Eddy -
Wow- awesome imagery, I loved this poem It was so excellently written, keep writing and thanks for commenting on my poem, I love your imagery here
All the best,
Pozo
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That was a beautiful poem, i read a lot of poems and read books and i try to place myself in the setting describe.
You really put me there.
You are truely a poet. -
James, What an amazing comment you have left here. Thank you so much. I can feel the thought and caring that went into this and I truly appreciate it.
Anna -
I really enjoyed this poem because it reminds me of a delicate bloom, just laying on the stem. It treats the realms of dreaming and love with such application and effort.
You bring the soul to us on paper.
Very soothing, very open to the eyes. It creates a beautiful fabric of thoughts that comes together to form a delicate and formal piece of poetry, that is not only grand, but thoughtful at the same time.
much love,
James
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Lost in the pools of your soul....
Hugs...Eddy -
I need more information!!
tweak it how? I am always open to ideas and I am very interested in what you think. Thank you for coming back and reading it again.
Anna -
Excellent
Beautiful poem and beautifully worded. I love the imagery you chose to use. A black velvet sky conjurs up so many pleasant images. I also love the imagery of a white cotton ocean. Very unusual and inspiring use of imagery. "Thanks for your comments on "Contrasts." I appreciate them very much. -
I love the poem just as much my second time around.
The only thing you might want to tweak with is the very first stanza.
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if this is not true love then what is ?
love it
hikmat -
le sigh
This was enrapturing and beautiful and just...so lovely.
I adore your poetry.
Every word seemed perfect here, to me.
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