No one wants a broken toy
No longer shiny and new.
Well used and tossed aside
Abandoned without a care.
Left to sit and stare out at the world
with eyes blinded to all,
by the crystallized kaleidoscope
of what was and what might never be again.
A distress signal emanating from it’s soul
Beckoning the Toy Master.
It’s message simple;
Help me, understand me, accept me, love me.
Some answer the beacon. Circling, reaching out,
At first not seeing the extent of the damage,
left behind by it’s previous owner.
Not seeing tempered steel bolted in place,
dismally protecting a mangled heart.
Not seeing the self destruct sequence
set in place the moment they came into radar.
But as the clock counts down
And the signs of imminent destruction draws near,
they flee.
With so many toys to choose from
they decide not to dawn their protective gear
and venture forth to diffuse the clock.
Swiftly throwing everything in reverse.
Jetting off at top speed.
Leaving the toy alone once more.
A little more worse for wear.
Propped up against the wall.
Beacon temporarily offline.
Repairs to the surface commence once more,
in hopes that one day it’s lonely call
will summon the Toy Master.
For it is He who has the compassion, patience
and understanding to end the cycle of self destruction.
Author notes
Thanks for holding the contest. Good luck to everyone!!
I commented on Twisted and HeartAche for NightAngel.
Written November 25th, 2004
A contest entry
- Darkness, Anger, Mad, Sad, and ANYTHING but Happy by BlackenedSoul10.
300 points, ended November 30, 2004, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You by Sofia Nadia.
800 points, ended May 31, 2007, 14 entries
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interesting euphemism
i am impressed by the whole idea of you being the toy that no one wants and being so 'beautifully broken'. i especially liked the ending in your reference to God (or what i can only assume is God b/c you capatalized the 'h' in 'him') i suppose i could be wrong though, maybe it's just someone who is very important to you. in any case, this gave me a great understanding of who you are and how you view yourself. i didn't particularly care for the structure and some of the grammar i felt was a little off, but overall this was well written. thanks so much for entering and good luck!!
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Thanks :)
Thank you for commenting. Just to take a moment to clarify. i don't capitalize god as i am more of a faith in many ruled by none type of gal. Capitalizing Him is a sign of respect to a nameless one.
i agree with your grammar comment, however I've never had any former training/education in poetry, I've participated in a couple of 'classes' on this site but find i prefer to be free in my thoughts and form. Get the point across with heart and soul instead of worrying about minor itches like grammar ~smile~.
Read the poems submitted, some were very very good!!
Take care
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i agree that yes, there could be a happy ending...but for some there never is and they die alone and no one knows or cares...and for some the pain of searching for the Toy Master is overwhelming and sooner or later they simply give up, the beacon never turning back on because it just hurts to much. And of course no one wants a broken toy. Self confidence, no baggage please etc etc. But again you're right, i don't think there is a situation in life that doesn't have a happy possibility somewhere. Thanks for taking the time to comment. This is the first poem i have featured, just needed feedback on this one...Cheers. Moon
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BTW, most maynot find this happy, but I see a happy possibility in it. Maybe thats just me.
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Wonderful poem and a wonderful message. I have always felt there is a place in the world for everyone and everything to feel loved and like they belong. It is sometimes not what they wish, but what they deserve and that is kinda sad but in most cases where we don't have what we want we need to keep looking. The place you are meant to be can be just around the corner. I know. I found it and it wasn't by myself. A toymaster must have helped. Good luck with this. It is indeed wonderful.
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Amazing poem, it's more like a story though. But that makes it even better! I really like this write, it's so compassionate! I really like it. Good luck in the contest!! Great poem.
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wow this was really amazing in my opinion!! I wish you all the luck for teh competion! I'll have my fingers crossed for you. Again kick ass job!
-April
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intresting write. nice symbolism. doesn't it suck to feel forgotten? great poem, nice wording , keep it up! very expressive BRAVO! keep writing, MoonOttawa
~sunrise777~
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