I love you, nearly as much as I do God,
Much more than myself.
There is nothing I would not do for you.
My love for you is like the ocean;
A tide coming and going,
Yet constant and dependable.
My love is like the devotion of a dog;
I will love you no matter what you
Say or do that may hurt me.
My love is like a sponge,
Soaking in all you give me.
My love is like the land on a sunny day,
Basking in your love and warmth.
I love you so much that at times I cry.
I am happy simply sitting beside you;
You needn't say a word, your presence is enough.
I love the deep rumble of your chest
When I lay my head upon it.
I love the feel of your just washed hair.
I love the smell of you when you come home
From work and kiss me.
If you were to leave me tomorrow
I would not want to go on.
Only God could hold a place in my being
As much as you.
I thank Him constantly for you.
He blessed me the day you came into my life.
I love you, nearly as much as God.
Author notes
A poem I wrote for my SO. He did not understand it; I had to explain it to him. However, that does not negate the feelings I carry. So much for sharing. LOL
There is a second part to this, dated more recently. I refuse to read him that one.
Entered in the contest: Tell Me About Your One - PREWRITES ARE ALLOWED!!!
by chandaliearring
Did not win, and no comment from the host.
This was an entry for the contest "Love Contest" by Hot Angel 777
Did not win.
Entered in the contest "I want to know about him! (My frist contest, yay!)" by ChillyGeorgiaPeach
allpoetry.com/Contest/2322664
Did not win and should not have entered it in this contest.
Written May 5th, 1999
Entered in the contest: reinstore my faith in love and men....by hadil http://allpoetry.com/contest/2337710
Did not win and host did not comment, but did read it, I guess.
A contest entry
- Love Poems. by OurxBeginning.
300 points, ended February 12, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Such a sweet piece. Love is a wonderful feeling, and you expressed it well. I liked the creativity in this, and your emotion shines bright.
Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Thank you for hosting.l
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Um, I thought I did emphasize my love for God to enhance this.
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I really like it, although I wish you had emphisized the love you had for God to enhance the feelings for your partner. However, I'm pleased with this entry.
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good write good luck
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Lovely lovely song of love.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. And it should be taken literally. That is the basis of the poem. Why whould it not be literal? Love of God is the utmost you can have. To place someone second only to God is the highest honour you can give. My love for everyone I know stems from my love of God. What higher standard is there? I am glad you liked it. It is very personal to me and even if he did not get it, I know what it means.
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I liked this because it says alot for the power of love, didn't so much like the comparrison with your love for God though. However i realize it shouldn't be taken to literal so well done, best of luck in the contest. Take care and God bless.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. And, I know what you mean. Some things come out rhyming, some do not. I just go with it.
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This is great, I do understand what you said up ^ I write like that a lot as well. I don't bother to rhyme. I just write.
Great write!
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To Dragonsblood,
The way I figure it, there is no rhyme nor rhythm to love; it just is. Most of my pieces from the heart are written so. The words just tumble out onto the paper. (It really annoys some readers.) Thank you for reading and commenting. -
Wow. Thank you, all, very much. I am very happy that you all could get so much from this. To me, this is true love. The kind you read about in old novels. And yes, it is still there after so many years. It is that whole soulmate kind of thing. I appreciate the reading and the commenting.
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oh this poem is gorgeous! I love your word choices and the vow of god in your life as well as your loved one its as if you spoke the words from my very heart. I am very moved by this piece. no rhyme or rhythm but the piece speaks fro the heart so deeply that I feel enthralled to read on. Your lines end in haphazard endings and dropped off pauses that make you wonder what the next will be and gives a constant wave of curiousity through me. *giggles* sorry, pun. great write I like this piece a lot.
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I dont really believe in god, but the way this poem is written and your emotions that come throu really hit me. Beautiful poem well written
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Wow I really enjoyed these comparisons and becomings about love. Your idea of love in this one way and the way in which you have chosen to invent and create this idea of love in your own personal way. Tony.
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Thumbs up!
All i could do is applaud this poem. Yes i do believe in God, but i also believe that Mother Nature is the true God, in a sense...i have my own beliefs/religion...kind of hard to explain..but in any case, i thank my God everyday in thought for blessing me with Jesse; whom i hope to be with for the rest of my life.I can see that in your poem here; that you love the person with such a great intensity, that to spend the rest of your life with him would be the greatest honour, the greatest thing you could ever wish for. I can relate...it's kind of refreshing to read poems like this, i'm used to the dark, morbid and dreary ones lol. Anyways, excellent write, good style and vocab...worthy of appraise, and worthy of being in this contest! Keep up the good writing! -
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OHH WOWW...not to sound cliche but I went 'WOW' like 4 or 5 times as i was reading this!! this is just so amazing and beautiful, it exhales so much tenderness, gentleness, devotion, passion, care, the eagerness to soothe, to give all of yourself out and do anything for this person, and how beautiful when you can actually find someone that reciprocates in equal manner all the beautiful and admirable love you describe you feel for this person...this was very uplifiting indeed...specially because you added the divinity of it, and indeed what a blessing that God has united your paths, for it is so awful when you love someone so much and you weren't loved in the equal and fair way but then how near perfect and blissful when True mutual love has embraced both souls, minds and bodies like what you describe here..
~ Juanpa
ps. May God always cover and light the path ahead for you both
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Thank you. It is good. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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this is well written and very beauitful, its a wonderful feeling to be able to love and to be loved in return. good luck in the contest.
manda
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Thank you. Without God, I do not feel we would have found each other.
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i love this. i love how you put God in this poem because He is the one that gives us love. i would not have found my love without divine intervention and, well, i am happy that you put Him into your poem. I love your choice of words. this is very simple and elegant and beautiful. i can feel the love and the simplicity of the little things in a relationship. you've really captured that. well done.
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I find it a little hard to believe. Personally, I love self, others, then God.
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This is very beautiful, I thank you for entering my contest
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I am happy that you could relate. To me, it is not the great moments in a relationship, but the little things that are not usually even noticed. Love and passion are important, but so are the small things. With age comes a mellowing that seems almost more intense than the drive that caused me to get married in the first place. That is what I wanted to capture here. I hope I have done it. Thank you for the comment.
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"I love the feel of your just washed hair", this is what really GOT me. What made me think of my wife, and remember some of the sweetness that we still share. Thank you so very much, Rous, for entering this heart-warming sentiment.
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Thank you for your comments. As for threatening God, it was not meant that way at all, as I see you discovered. Only God holds a higher place in my heart. Even my children come after him. And I found the most striking images to show my love for him. And he does not get it. Oh, well. If you want the flip side of the poem, check out Crush The Blossom Fair. It does not change how I feel, just how much feeling I put into it now.
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the first two lines of this poem held me intrigued and curious, it is hard to fathom loving someone so much that your love of the creator is "threatened", but those lines give real expression of the depth of the love. "I love you
Nearly as much as I do God" instantly makes the reader aware that this is serious loving.
I actually fet envious of the recipient of such unbridled unadulterated love....you have a gift that I hope you continue to nurture, thereby blessing us mere mortals -
Oh I didn't mean to come off as saying there is anything wrong with that. Haha, hell I surprised myself so much when I fell in love because I was this angry feminist who wanted to complete herself before being completed by a man.
Unknowingly my boyfriend changed how I feel about a lot of my "feminist ideals." I feel similar to you and your poem. Love IS very important! YAY!
Anyway, write on!
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Thank you for your comment. As far as the uncreations of the female identity, I feel that I am defined by my love. It is given because I choose to give it. And it is so not his. He disagrees with it on many levels, including the fact that I place so much importance on that love. And he feels undeserving of it. So it is very much about me and not, as someone else commented, his feelings.
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YAY
The feminist in me cannot love this for the absolute...uncreation of the female identity I experienced when I read this.
However, the woman in love in me totally related to this, haha. I understand exactly how you feel, but I would have preferred more of your details such as the rumble in his chest etc. Those parts made me see the piece as YOURS , not his...which isn't necessarily a bad thing, I just wanted to hear more of your personal thoughts in how he makes you feel.
Nicely written
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Well Done!
I love love poems from the heart This is a wonderful piece full of imagery. It flowed well read smooth and was all around wonderful. Thank you for sharing this
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excellent
Wow. I loved this poem so much. It was beautiful. The flow was great. Wow. Excellent job. Pure excellence.
peace and love
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That was a beautiful poem.
Ilove the way you put your heart into describing how you feel for someone.
P.S the poem i wrote apology goes back to a write i did calle Improperly blended.
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Actually, he is. Just too literal-minded to understand anything not written in black-and-white. It makes for and interesting relationship. Thank you all, so much.
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Wow- this is a really romantic poem, I guess that your husband isn't Christian or is v vain (no offence
) if he wanted to be higher than God in your esteem
Wonderful write, so romantic and a great tribute
All the best,
Pozo
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I liked this..and your husband must be a doofus not to understand it lol. You made a comment on one of my poems about rhythm, comma's,etc. ummmmm. But you know what, when you get in touch with the writers heart..your own heart beats the rythym of the writer..Keep writing from 'your' heart and let no one discourage you..only you know how your heart beats and speaks - That is what makes us individuals
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Wow this is a beautiful love poem. The person you wrote it too should feel very honored indeed. I could feel your words intertwine in my love for my husband. Thank you also for commenting on my poem.
Great poem - keep em coming
FifthDove
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