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Darkness' Lustful Beauty

This *A*stounding beauty has stolen my heart.
With her *S*oft liquoured eyes which have torn me apart.
This beautiful goddess *H*as caused me to be humbled with fear.
So take my heart *L*est I fall into darkness' snare.
With disarming sweetness of midsummer's *E*ve dew.
My lustful goddess this therefore is *Y*ou.




*not an entry...more like a tribute... hope u like...*

Author notes

...If you look closely you'll see the pattern spelling out your name hun.
Written November 21st, 2004

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  • jaunty pill gold member
    December 12, 2004
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    What a great dedication to my little sweet666 ,She is precious , Isn't she. I really enjoyed the way you did this. The ideas are fantastic , And They are just good.

    I especially love how the tone is flowy , The rhymes don't sound forced. It comes off as complete , Modern , And detailed. Not much to say here , A really fantastic piece. I'm glad I found you new friend. We shall share wonderful moments.

    Be well and nice work ,
    james
    Edited on Dec 12, 8:00 p.m. because ''.


  • AngelGiggle
    December 3, 2004
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    Wow, this is really good. Congrats on winning 1st!!

  • IHeartFatBoyz
    November 21, 2004
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    OH MY GOD!!! I LOVE IT!! hehe this is soooo cool!! WOW do you mind if I put this on my author page? THIS MADE MY NIGHT! hehe I love it!!