When the time is right my love
will you come dance with me?
beneath the stars that shine,
like the stars in our eyes.
When the time is right my love
will we meet as lovers do?
walk beside me holding hands,
just like we do in our dreams.
When the time is right my love
will we kiss beneath the moon?
watch the sunrise in the morn,
as it rises above the mountain.
When the time is right my love
will we meet each other again?
not just in our dreams at night!
come to me my love, be with me.
When the time is right my love
will be the right time for us.
Author notes
never give up on your dreams
they do come true.
Written November 21st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- 3 choices!!! wooo!!! by crystaltips.
300 points, ended December 5, 2004, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Jenni i must always n now confes that u are wizard of all time poet i find her u develp from lamp to shine of sun it has been sadi when the sun set it can`t be sow so u shall prosper i prom,ise to make 10 comment of this wen i go back home i really m,iss reading it all
abdul
i am cray fro this poem sister -
Thanks for commenting, I will be by to check more of your work out-jennifer
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very wel written!
wow, this is really exellent, thank you for commenting on my poems. I truly do love this and great work, I will have more poems soon, so please come check me out from time to time! thanks!
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4 stars ****
When the time is right, will you get that spider out?
lol, sorry for that joke above, i know it didnt suit here, but yeah, you are going great with your poetic estyle, ummm, i got deeply engrossed in the poem, it is jus so calm and soothing poem , which can touch anyone's heart, everyone's soul. and to be more precise, its a sweet and cute write, best of all my wishes for this contest.and yes, dont forget to *SMILE AWAY THE PAIN* -
wow what another great love poem... I love reading your works I am glad that I came across your Ap name... You are amazing
When the time is right my love
will we kiss beneath the moon?
watch the sunrise in the morn,
as it rises above the mountain.
that is my favorite part... Ohh it is so moving... GREAT write
Jenn
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Super!
It's a beautiful poem, you have a great way with words. :-) It had a beautiful ending:
"When the time is right my love
Will be the right time for us" -
Thank you for commenting on my poem and leaving the helpful tips, it's all fixed now
jennifer
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This seems so heartfelt, and I can definitely sympathize with that feeling! I do have one question, in the first stanza is "star's" meant to be "stars", and in the second "lover's" meant to be "lovers"?
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It's really good to fantasize with a dream guy as I often do with my lovely Knight, and upon reading your piece I couldn't help but smile because I could very well relate and it's kinda similar with my thoughts to some of my works. No wonder I liked it! Guess I have to read more of your poems. Goodluck in the contest. By the way, nice photo!
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Jennifer, this is such a beautiful love story, I gather it's about your Mr Wonderful you always talk about? I loved reading this, it put a smile on my face and Hooley Dooley you know me! it doesnt take much to do that, Love Sally
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Thank you MisJudged for your kind comment-Jennifer
Edited on Nov 21, 7:41 p.m. because ''. -
Thank you Ed for your kind comments-jennifer
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i loved it. it was so sweet. it wasnt forced at all and was great! i still cant even begin to gather words that can compair to it! it really touched me. great job! until next time
MisJudged -
Heart felt poetry
such a heartfilled poem. The story is masterfully written and the story of such love told. You tied the inner most feelings with the beauty if nature. I love your poetry. I wish you luck in the contest. -
thank you crystal, I have added a picture to it-Jennifer
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this was fabulous! well done i really enjoyed this and the flow was brilliant- you did a good job- good luck in the contest Crystal xxx
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