so you ask me then:
tomorrow?
our feet choke (again)
in the fog of possible
answers
that are somewhere beyond
their s q u i n t i n g
today is not
a good day for walking
(with blindfolds
on our feet)
between question marks
and sun
fog is common
filled with contradictory
l e t t e r s
let’s rest here a while
in the valley
of poems
and wait
for our appointment
with the sun
Author notes
Sometimes you don’t know the answers (not even the answers to a special love and the challenges that love brings) and it feels like you’re walking with your feet in the mist. Then it's the time to wait... for the sun to filter through (maybe by writing the fogginess & darkness away, writing towards the light).....
Written November 21st, 2004
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Alese..and thanks for the applause too!
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Thank you, giascully, for your lovely comment! Best wishes to you too....
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love the imagry, wonderfuly unique flow. a really great poem indeed. good work, keep it up.
all my best wishes to you, and good luck in my contest
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Idioteque, thank you once again, for your lovely compliments on my poetry. WOW - I am honoured and I am smiling
- be well - I hope to read some of your poetry soon!
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This is definetly the kind of poem that goes beyond meaning. I really hope your talent is recognized...I'm pretty sure you'll get the prize...there's really nothing else to say about stunning and beautiful words...
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Thank you very much - glad you liked this visit to the valley of poems ~
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I really like this and the poem is awesome!!! Well done. you wrote it briliantly! Good work and keep it up. p.s nice background!
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after your explanation re-reading it makes sense so great write and thanks for explaining x
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Thank you for your very kind comment - much appreciated. I just spell-checked it again and it says "no misspelled words" - or are you referring to the spaces placed between some of the letters? That was intentional Take care and best wishes!!
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this was a really good piece and a great interpretation of what I asked for. I thought this was very abstract and the structure worked brilliantl with what you were saying be careful with your spelling otherwise fantastic keep it up x
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Thank you for your kindness - take care!
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this is so creative and I love the format, very fitting. You did a great job on this, the symbolism was awesome.
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You glisten with the ecstasy of a solemn marvel in this piece. I'm enjoying reading your pieces. Viva le Rumi! ~ EZB
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Thank you Kate, this was one of those poems that just came to me. Glad you liked it - take care and good luck on the judging!
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This whole piece is unique and creative, and absolutely beautiful. It's almost like you're portraying the route we're not so sure of in life, and waiting for hope (the sun) to shine through on our way.
Thank you so much for this excellent entry.
Kate
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Thank you my friend - so great to see you again! Every time I read your comments on my poems I SMILE in capital letters. Hope the muse smiles on you too - take care and best wishes!
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Everytime I come here and read one of your wonderful poems I am reminded of what truly outstanding poetry is.Very creative with the format with this poem as well.My plight is one with the contest runner "empathy-eyes" and I hope I establish contact with my muse soon.Until then I will be recycling some old wine....Best wishes
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Geeh very nice poem and it would be ideal to meet the loved one in the wonderful valley of poetry it seems almost impossible.
P.S Seeing that you like Pablo Neruda I've just seen him on tv
this night here in Toronto Canada where I think he was visiting.
I remember distictly a poem of his where he talk about poverty and it must be extracted like a decaying and rotten tooth.
Africa must be a dream. I've enjoyed reading your author's page.
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Wow Nicolette this is fantastic and I love the whole form and style of the poem as well as the beautiful wording and meaning....great job, it's nice to see how many other poets admire your work.
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Smiles! thank you and yes, I love Pablo Neruda!
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OMG! "on our feet"! I am meeting people who seem to feel what I feel.
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A superb write my dear Nicolette ... It has been a while since I graced your pages, and sadly it is I who has been the loser.
I agree with Moses ... "let’s rest here a while in the valley of poems" ... is a truly beautiful line.
Thank you,
(((((HUGS)))))
Sammy
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really....wonderfully written! amazing how you came up with it
Keep up your special way of writing, and I wish you best of luck with this contest!
Leander -
I like this...thanks for entering and best wishes to you.
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I truely honestly loved this poem! I love how you used the form to make it even more poetic. Your choice of words is great and it looks like you are very creative! Keep it up! BB Morgaine
ps sorry I didn't leave a comment before, it wasn't about the points, I just didn't get the system, never meant to insult or abuse. -
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Interesting choice of wording, but good.
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beautifully written and definately thought provoking.... Although, with the broken-hearted day I seem to be having it's making me a little teary... (but I think everythign is today!) Good write!
All the best
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Oh my. I like this. it's beautiful. the imagery is beyond words. <3 Love it.
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Beautiful! The unwritten emotions in poem suggests so much more than what you are actually showing with the words...
I love:
"our feet choke – again –
in the fog of possible answers"
Brilliant!
Cheers!
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ohh iam sorry for not leaving a comment but yesterday i was much in ahurry..and didn't read it properly..now i read it..iam commenting not just to give back ur points but wanna say i really loved this piece
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A surprise ending that added a great deal to this poem. This is kind of a play on words: with the fog, the sun, blindness and squinting. That one line has such a magnificent ring to it - "let’s rest here a while in the valley of poems" - and it kind of ties everything together and makes it all right; makes life worth living afterall!
Moses
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very good. it makes you think a lot, i like poems that do that. i try to make mine sort of like this but it never works
good job
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hi.....I didn't comment before cuz I was in a hurry. but after your im, I'm commenting, and I'll aplaud this for you.
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I think this is perhaps one of the best poems of yours I have read to date Nicolette. This is steeped in symbolism and I love the format in which it has been delivered. The references to 'blindfolds' and 'fog' seem to denote confusion and uncertainty -perhaps tempting fate to intervene ?
My kind of poetry
~ Sonia ~ XX
Edited on Nov 21, 5:45 p.m. because ''. -
OK, I'll get the negative bit 'over and done with'. This was a difficult poem for my eyes, could you change the text colour to blue or something darker? Good write, though, it was really positive and beautifully written Keep writing, this was lovely
All the best,
Pozo
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Beautiful and Wise
You delve deeper and come up with so much hope!!! It is interesting how you weave the words to sing to your tune and then dance in tune with the words themselves.
So much truth and wisdom in this write and the form makes it a rare beauty.
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This is very thought provoking and makes me ponder abrupt and swift answers to questions that relate to my pen. I don't always know why I wrote a particular poem. I do agree that the revelation of my words comes at its appointed time. This is really one to ponder, you have left me with my hand under my chin in wonder, for me that is a good thing. Great work!
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a lovely wonderment in the fog of possibilities,
an so it is in life that we muster a walk in question till
we meet up with the Sun and know what our future holds.
great job
Tamara
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very beautifully put
very lovely
when one is caught between a truth and a fabrication
tha knowing pause
if they have to stop and think about it
its not all good
that itself is the telling tale
bravo
for honesty
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Sometimes I think that Sun represents hope. I dont know why. But here in Seattle, WA we dont get much of true sun. Just the crappy stuff that is blocked by clouds and it hurts the eyes... Maybe thats just me, but hey Im weird.
I like the style of this write. It is like no other and I really apriciate that. It is nice to read something that it is a bit different from the usual. Specially when it comes to some one like me who has the same bland style.
Thanks for sharing!!!
And thanks for making me think about the sun and the fog... it felt good
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Yes...life is so often like that...like walking in the darkness...never quite sure of the path...until you walk out into the sun...and then you know. You just know.
UB
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this was an awesome poem. there are a lot of times where you can be lost and have multiples of possible answers. good write-kris
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Thank you, dear Luke-friend - much appreciated - keep walking the path of love!
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Again, a brilliant poem! I sometimes get lost in the fog of wanting to know the answer, but then I find that if I just keep walking through the mist, the answers will be waiting for me when the mist rises. Well done dear friend!!
Luke
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Venessa, thank you so much! The fog happens sometimes, but the sun is so much stronger. Your "colour" poem sort of inspired me to write this - take care, dear friend!
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Thank you, Ann, for your love and kindness, sweet soul! Yes, the roses are there - even in the fog. Take care!
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My dear friend, this is a lovely write. It brings such beautiful thoughts of strength and hope. Sometimes we may think the 'fog' in our life is too strong but in the end it was only there to help us enjoy our life. Nicely done.
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Nicolette, this is quite a lovely piece once again my friend...Sometimes stopping for a moment, in the fog means to me, taking the time to smell the roses, as one says, to regain the hope and strenght to continue lifes long journey, this is simply beautiful! Ann
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Sad yes, but the promise of sun is also there in the closing lines - eventually the sun will chase away the fog and we will see the blue day
love always
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hopeful is the sun ... unknowing is the fog ... in oscillation between the two. Depending where u stand, whether ur eyes are raised or lowered, depending on the breeze, the clouds in the sky, depending upon faith in things to come or the here and now. But for me, the poem is so sad, and I know you are sad too.
love always
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Baby, I didn't do nuttin' but make an observation of the Truth!!! (My specialty...hehehe)
Silly ol' girl, anyways...you are special!!! You're a poet...& our Friend!!! So there!!! You cannot argue with my impeccable logic...LOL 
Wanda
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Anna, you are special and your Pearl poem for me....that I will always treasure!
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thank you Nicolette
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thank you Night Hope for making me special here...and just like today i feel like I've been kissed by the sun...mush
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Indeed Wanda - it is three!!
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Better make that three, Nic...I read Anna Lee's 'Pearl' poem for you earlier!!! You're an easy one to smile at, my Friend... As my dear Friend Nour (poet Forbidden) & I say to each other (she's in Lebanon)...'Love across the globe!!!' Wanda
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Anna Lee, thank you dear friend for shining the sun of your soul on me! to you!
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Wow....I am still busy editing this poem and already two great poets have visited me!! Thank you, dearest Wanda, for the light touch of your hand and your soul . I've actually tried something new with poem - and I'm so happy that you smiled on me! Big smiles this side of the world - love to you, my friend in poetry (and more)
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et’s rest here a while
in the valley
of poems
and wait
for our appointment
with the sun
the sun...appointment Stunning!...to be kissed by the sun when the right time comes for a new beginning...to be able to know what's good about having the sun against the skin...while waiting...
beautiful Nicolette! -
let’s rest here a while
in the valley
of poems
and wait
for our appointment
with the sun
LOL @ chas...he's wonderful... Nicolette...you are wonderful, too...in a much different way!!! I love this poem, as well...I don't expect to ever read one of yours & say, 'Nah...don't like it a bit'...it just ain't gonna happen!!! Yes, my Friend...waiting for the Light to filter through the fog that envelopes Dream...beautiful, Lady...as always... Wanda
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Yeah, they say that thing about patience! Thank you so much, chasingtheday, for the great compliment - my toes echo that wiggling one of yours!
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