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Prelude to a Breakdown

guilty as self-charged,
i must be punished
for crimes i have not committed,
even if it kills me

it does kill me,
at least on the inside

blood replaces the tears
i can not shed
for this shit-hole
of a planet

for a race
that starves, beats,
rapes and kills
it's own young

you ask me
why i am depressed,
and i wonder
why you aren't

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Written November 19th, 2004

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  • EmotionalWreck
    December 7, 2004
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    AMAZING

    This was very good. I can relate to how you feel, which is unfortunate. Well expressed and good job! Thanks for entering and good luck!
    ~Haley~


  • Cold-Hearted Angel
    December 6, 2004
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    Love it. Such a perfect portrail of the world nowadays. It is indeed true of all you said in this verse:
    for a race
    that starves
    and beats
    and rapes
    it's own young

    I feel ya. I really do. Keep up with the writing and your head held high. Someday the world will come to peace..Even if it means our own demise and destruction. Keep up hope and don't lose sight of the light in the darkest of times.

    -Much love
    -Kayla


  • Sara Bellem
    November 25, 2004
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    This hits my heart in more ways than one... I am so sorry that you are feeling what you are feeling inside, I totally understand how you are feeling and its amazing how the assholes think nothing of it and just go on with day to day life as we have to struggle to get through a day with the feelings you have. I am here if you ever want to talk ---Sara


  • FalseReality
    November 20, 2004
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    Brillant

    Wow, you've put the words we all long to say so powerfully... so bluntly... so PERFECT! I scream this through lips that don't move everyday! Yes... this is what our world has come to... It's a terribly sad thought. I absolutly loved this. Keep your head up and the pen down. FalseReality

  • Sweet Briar
    November 20, 2004
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    Agony of tearz

    This was a very well written poem it was dark and feeled with so much pain.. It just sent chills down me

    Jenn

  • DarkPrincess07
    November 20, 2004
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    A title? Beats me. I like the one chic's suggestion. But anyhoo- I like this poem. It tell a lot about the world and I think it's something that is in much need of being said. I'm glad you could put into words what many of us feel about the world. It was a good write.
    -Kayla


  • myrataal silver member
    November 20, 2004
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    Dearest Soul -

    We may not allow the world to silence our pain ... By posting poems like yours, stoned hearts may be ripped open, so that we all may resist the effects of abuse on all levels. We must act with powerful personal responsibility - each and every one must take control over his or her own pain, either by seeking help, or by tackling it with obstinate determination. Only THEN we may change this world.

    Never give up!



    Myra


  • myrataal silver member
    November 20, 2004
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    Title: Agony of Abuse

    Love

    Myra

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