The look in your eyes
the moisture on your lips
the touch of your skin
makes me love you more each day
Your breath on my neck
as you walk up behind me
arms pulling me in close
makes the fire inside ignite
You remove my dress
with a delicate touch
tongue drawing circles
up and down my neck
Gripping my breasts
I gasp in deep
knees becoming weak
I want you deep inside
Take me in your arms
on the bed I lay
move up above me
sliding in so easily
You look into my eyes
hypnotized I am
you have me completely
I am enslaved by your love
~Vampira1665~
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Just a thought.
Written November 19th, 2004
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Timeless Stunning & Beautifully Penned
Every song I read by you is perfection!
And I mean this kiss of love that I send
O Lady Raven this song gripped me down to my knees
A million and one applause for you
This is passion that can’t be tamed
Oh I wish I had the courage to write this way
Today and Yesterday
Enslaved by your love is beautiful lyrically and I could feel
Each move your lover made I was there within this song
This is how deep your heartstrings reach me
O I could feel his breath and your timeless passion
Now that I’m undone
I will look for the one
Who ignites my inner fires of desire
I know the feeling oh so well of being hypnotized within someone’s eyes
It’s a feeling you have totally and completely described
In a love affair that burns as one deep within your eyes
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Mmmm, sam does that to me all the time.
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I'll show you enslaved, when i tie you to your bed and make you moan with delight
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in the DARK of night will be the love that will cage the soul to be enslaved by two hearts to unite them as one. their love will live on.
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wow great write. I thought your choice of words was very good, it was just a very well written poem over all. I really liked the ending. Well done, keep penning.
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I really, really like this! It's really lusty and erotic, but classy none the less. And the flow is perfect. Nice work!
Nice photo, too. Type O...mmmm!
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It's deep and good.
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This is meant to be sultry and erotic, but this feels to me as though you are having sex with a machine. Tell me, apart from him titillating you in the most obvious sense, what makes this guy so gosh-darned hot? What does he look like? What are his passions like? In any which sense, I appreciated this poem because, even though it seems unfeeling to me, there is not enough literature about lust from a woman's perspective. With that said, I thought it was ironic that the first line was "The look in your eyes" when, in the photograph, both the man and the woman's eyes are closed -- so there really is no look, and even if there was, the woman wouldn't know it because her eyes are closed. And I guess that signifies the whole entire poem. Just two corpses, who look dead, humping each other. Now, I know this is probably about a real life romance, and your biggest complaint against this review is that it doesn't reflect the reality -- but the only way I can empathize with the reality of your emotions is if you translate that into your poem. With that said, I do think you have talent. I await your masterpiece.
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perfect
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AWESOME!
You definately deserve my applause for this one... and im bookmarking it. I liked how its so passionate... without creating too much of a visual, its kinda left for the reader to connect the lines! thats awesome!!! Your words flowed togeather perfectly- the tital was very origional also!... thanx for sharing! great write!
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Marvelous. I love the way that you express lovemaking not as freaky or "fuck fuck fuck" i like the word choices you used and how they flowed together like a river. Very good job!
XOXO
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Ow I feel all warm and yummy where is my man ? lol Terrific poem well done loved the presentation too
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sweet
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I really liked this, very hot
Very descriptive, and it flowed very nicley Great great GREAT job!!
-Ash,
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I love this. It is very good... Wonderful in fact. Your words are lovely and well-written. I adore how respectably written this is and you made the event look so lovely (which it is). The feelings towards the other person was expressed very clearly which I adre.
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ooooooohhh! I loved this delicious little tidbit...very erotic and pleasing to read. sigh................please feel free to write many more like this! Excellent job!
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ooooOOOOOOOooo :melts: i love well written erotic poems, and this is definitely a great example of one. sexy without being vulgar, erotic and still poetic. great job!!!
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