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My Promise

I see rainbows of color
and I see them in your eyes.
Not everyone can seem them.
They're hidden in disguise.
Don't ever take for granted
my everlasting love for you.
Until my last gasping breath,
there is nothing I'd never do.

CHORUS

I'll be in your every dream
to chase away the nightmare.
I'll stop you from your fall.
I promise to give you my all.
Don't ever doubt my love
because it's in these very words
my promise I give to you.

I give you my heart
for your hand to hold.
I don't need expensive gifts
because your love for me
is worth more than gold.

REPEAT CHORUS

So here I am, pouring out
my heart and soul.
Being together forever
is my life pursuing goal.

REPEAT CHORUS

Author notes

this is my first song i've written, so please don't be too harsh when critiquing
Written October 19th, 2004

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  • Agape Justin
    December 5, 2004
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    there is nowhere to be harsh on. I loved it and enjoyed every line. This love lyric is really good. Is there a tune to it? I'd love to hear it. Don't give up, keep writing more lyrics. The first stanza has a unique magic around it and the words just superb and lovely.

  • Miserable
    November 19, 2004
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    this is just f*cking cgggggggoooodddd gotcha ya lol jks jks i love it its really good if you have time id like you to enter my contest?