A new prey has entered their territory...
She is so beautiful and full of confidence.
As she watches them investigate to discover
her intentions...
And cheekily laughs at them,
for always being wrong.
Each one of them want her attention,
And so the chase begins.
The trophy is the capture,
The one who gets to her heart,
The one that she surrenders her freedom to,
Is the one that is today's champion.
Once caught her vibrance begins to dull,
Her feathers, they've started to fade.
Her words no longer affect his thoughts,
His feelings want to stray.
Once the chase had been exciting,
To pursue such a challenge...
To feel the satisfaction of victory
Was the adrenaline he needed
To conquer and take home the prize.
Now he chases another victory,
Tries to double his prize.
Left her waiting, while he begins to stray.
She knows that something is happening,
So she wipes her tears away.
Its time to spread her wings again,
And fly towards the light of a new day...
He misses her now, for it feels like its been some time.
So expectantly, he thought she would stay.
Filled with regrets, his heart cries now,
For the One who got Away.
Author notes
Written November 18th, 2004
A contest entry
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1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
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"Its time to spread her wings again,
And fly towards the light of a new day..."
Wonderful images pouded into my head when I read that.
Powerful.
Good luck to you, thank you for entering.
Lullaby.x.
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um.... yea....
Have we met?? It seems like you're pulling a page out of my diary, almost. (of course, I don't actually keep one, the whole admissible evidence thing and all) I love the 3rd stanza, ("vibrance begins to dull") it is so true. Once a man has "captured" a woman, they lose interest in said woman. Great job!
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Thankyou so much for your applause and your comment
I think most women can relate to this at one stage or another before we learn to jucge our men better!
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He misses her now, for it feels like its been some time.
So expectantly, he thought she would stay.
Filled with regrets, his heart cries now,
For the One who got Away.
well written , thoughtful piece... yes and he will never be able to find peace for he knows that he screwed up big time , his loss is somebody elses gain...
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Thankyou so much for your comment and your applause I appreciate the comment xxxx
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Mmmm. This is a very interesting write. For many years I worked with men in prison on relationship issues. This piece is vey deep and goes tto the core of the preditator/prey issues many men with self0esteem issues have. Protrayed in a poetic way
Very nice write.
Marianne
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Thankyou so much for taking the time to read and appreciate my poem! Im glad you were able to see what the goal of this write was directed at, Thankyou
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Hmmm...interesting. Feels like a reflections on the relationship games people (think they) find (fleeting) pleasure from... In this case not really satisfactory for both persons...I like bird-of-prey-like references!
I love:
"Once the chase had been exciting,
To pursue such a challenge..."
It perfectly nails the futility of a lot of 'hunting'...
Cheers!
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