Song set to Dark Isle. MIDI can be found at www.tadpole.mytunebook.de/tunes/xtracelt/darkisle.mid
(Listed with permission)
Please listen to the music, it will make the flow smoother.
Song of Lament
(Elrénia's Song)
Over the mountains
From the sea
The land stretched out
Too far to see
The land runs red
The enemy bold
Twas all proclaimed,
Prophesies old.
The sky does cry
Its tears rain down
Falls on the dead
Lying on the ground
Its sorrow soothes
Down from above
Cov'ring the lost
The ones I love
Weep not for me
I've always known
I'll sacrifice
My life, my own
I'll never see
My sons again
They lie beneath
The Sylvan glen
Now rest, my love
Your pain is stayed
Your sleeping place
A stone-cold grave
The peoples freed
They count the lost
Evil repelled
But, what a cost!
Back to the west
My pain I flee
The price too great
It wears on me
Immortal love
I've never sought
I now will die
My chosen lot
Now hie away
The gray boats sail
I grasp for peace
But to no avail
The only thing
Can mend my heart
To know in death
We'll never part.
Author notes
This song inspired by the LOTR movie version of the Battle of the Hornsburg, however, it can apply to any war at any time in history.
It speaks of the loss of those left behind.
Entered in the contest: All about love by boxofcrums
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Did not win, and there was no comment made by the host.
Entered in the contest: I want your lyrics!! by weirdsis amz
allpoetry.com/Contest/2101873
Placed first with a gold trophy and 300 points.
Written December 30th, 2003
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- I want your lyrics!! by weirdsis amz.
300 points, ended July 2, 2006, 15 entries
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Weirdsis,
Thank you for your comment. I am glad you like it. My songs do not do well here; not cutting enough, I guess. I do hope this is dark enough for you, though. -
MM
Thank you for your comment. I appreciate it.
Rous -
i love how this flows and its so meaningful. i love it. its so emotional and meaningful... i think i already said that... oh well i just love it!!!! thanx for the attachment to the midi!
Goodluck
Keepwriting
Amz -
Very well written. I love the flow.
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If it is stuck in your head, then my job is done. Thank you all for your comments. I appreciate each and every one. And if I did not thank you personally, I apologize. I have had problems logging on. The site has issues.
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wow awsome job i cant seem to get it out of my head good work keep it up
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Thank you for your comment. This was the first song I wrote. It really means a lot to me. I am glad you liked it. I hope you understood it. Most do not, but then, that is poetry.
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Wow. That was really good. I really like the rhyming - excellent job. It seemed to hold such meaning and emotion.
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brilliant.
This is wonderfully written and so sad, But I feel he still goes on waiting for death which i hope is what he has done.I felt as though seeing all this with my own eyes, wonderful. -
What a wonderfully written poem. Keep up the excellent writing...I love it!
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Great!
Wow! This is wonderful and full of emotion. The flow is just fantastic! I really like this. Goodluck in the contest!
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Um, her husband and sons die in war. And she does not kill herself. It is based on the world of LOTR. She chooses to die a mortal rather than sailing West where she would live forever. However, it is really about the loss due to war and the toll of those left behind. But I am glad you liked it. I hope the music helped.
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wow this is so so good i was reading it and i was just amazed at such beauty even though in the people this person loves are gone and he ends up killing him self it was just so good it flowed so well i just think it was so good your lyircs are so good keep writing for us all! well good luck!
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Then you should check out A Changing Of The Guard. Also LOTR.
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Wonderful write! Loving LOTR, so I love this poem! Keep up the good work.
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Very Good
Awesome Piece
Keep the good job.
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