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Life's mysterys

 

Why, do we bother what people think...
are we so shallow, as to allow others,
to carbon copy us into little replica's
of what they would see as perfect;

Life's little flaws are often the most honest,
as they would experienced life in the raw
and draw strength from it rather than
be cushioned by well wishers

"What you see is what you get" is an expression
that I would use about myself, a little
rough round the edges, with a heart that bleeds;
words, that run over themselves in their hurry
to form a likeness  to my mind's eye
my only salvation

This private side I guard as a shepherd guards
his sheep; I am vulnerable,.. I will break ..I feel,
but do I mimic or clutch at straws,
perhaps but never knowingly, I am what I am
I shall never be anything else, so if you seek
me out be prepared.... for "What you see is
just half of what you get " ........

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Written November 16th, 2004

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  • cake
    November 17, 2004
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    Well beyond the printing word here and a few decorative elements can't see much more don't know what we're getting, kidding and you are right perhaps people get too wrapped up with appearances, we live in a world where there is so much emphasis on looks that we are all tense and often uncomfortable even with ourselves. It takes time to discover true beauty and people do not take the time. cake


  • cutiepie gold member
    November 17, 2004
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    Thank you I often think people worry too much about what others think about them, if only they could be theirselves, it would make the world a much easier place to live in


  • Venessa
    November 16, 2004
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    YES YES YES!!!! A thought I have OFTEN!! I hate how society sets the standards for 'perfect'. I think everyone is perfect ~ everyone is the perfect 'them' Nice write so much truth!!


  • cutiepie gold member
    November 16, 2004
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    Thank you for your lovely comments, I was touched that you found some comfort in the words


  • intimah-01
    November 16, 2004
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    I remember the scenery of mine into your poem...Sometimes, we tend to do things out of people expectations from us...but it would be nicer if we do things out of our tru self...Your poem pertains to being true to yourself without allowing others to control ourselves...It just made me cry when I questioned myself why I have to live with what people expectations? It also made our break up cos they can't accept my hubby that time...Later, I realized I have my own to do what I want to do...Your poem is very inspirational and the ideas are great...Hope to read more...keep writing!

  • cutiepie gold member
    November 16, 2004
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    Thank you Patricia, I hope that means you liked it just jesting I do appreciate your kind words. Many thanks


  • pattyann4500
    November 16, 2004
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    If read the way prose is intended to be read, this is actually perfect! Very well done. Patricia


  • cutiepie gold member
    November 16, 2004
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    ok you made me smile but don't you always

  • cutiepie gold member
    November 16, 2004
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    Lol, made me think of that old saying... "Cant make a silk purse out of a sows ear "...hehe. Thanks for your comments, they are appreciated


  • November 16, 2004
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    and there is nothing better than.....

    bed hair

    mmmmmmmmm

    its just all kinds of cuddly


  • November 16, 2004
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    kudos miss lynne
    wise words

    ppl should look beyond perfedtion
    they might b surprised
    at least pleasantly amused

    fot the most part
    what i find i love the most in ppl
    are the flaws

    why you women think you have to wear make up is beyond me
    lol

    cuz youre already
    beautiful

  • cutiepie gold member
    November 16, 2004
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    It would certainly be less complicated All too often we are faced with a deceitful soul who plays havoc with our emotions, if only they were who they said they were... It would make like a little easier


  • cutiepie gold member
    November 16, 2004
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    Thank you Caiomhe Im glad the message came across

  • Shatteredreams
    November 16, 2004
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    Wouldn't it be nice if we all were "what you see is what you get"???


  • Maiden of Mourning
    November 16, 2004
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    Great

    I definately agree with this poem. There are so many "clones" out there. This poem was worded beautifully, and definately sends out a good message. Very good read.


  • cutiepie gold member
    November 16, 2004
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    Thank you I am delighted that you enjoyed it . Many thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated

  • Stick Bug
    November 16, 2004
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    9/10

    The break from one line to the next could have been better in some areas, but overall, this is a good piece. It's very truthfdul and well worded. Keep writing.

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