Beneath a luminescent platinum glow
I lie, blanketed by fluid cobalt sheets;
A diaphanous touch caresses my skin
While your name prances upon whispers...
Position prostrate, it's for you I await
To sate cravings awake yet suppressed;
Eyes shutting, I beckon you silently,
Conceiving that lush form in my mind
As heat slithers along flailing limbs,
Preparing this body for carnal invasion
You appear then, splashed by moonlight,
Piqued by bold displays of wanton flesh...
A vitreous gaze gleams with concupiscence,
Absorbing the lust brimming deep within;
When you kneel to hover just above me,
I'm instantly assaulted by ravenous lips
Eager to explore every zenith and ravine;
Responding ardently to a kindled figure,
Fervent hands deliberate peeling away
Stubborn raiments straining my lush form
Loins stir under the full moon's influence;
Gesticulating fingers roam quivering sinew,
Lighting the embers of esoteric passion
As liquefied hunger surges to my estuary
Where you imbibe frothy waters of ecstasy
Then, in a flash of moment, love permeates,
Arousal heightened by our stuttering breaths;
You claim me, delectable strokes engorging,
Vanquished in the allure of night's calling
Underneath the orb where we fuse together.
Author notes
inspired by a photo... had to dig deep into my memory to find the corresponding feelings.
Written November 15th, 2004
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Absolutely a gorgeous and awesome piece! So tastefully done and beautifully written! Thank you so much for this sharing! It was a pleasure to read!
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This was gorgeous. Made me feel like I was there (or to wish I was)
But the carnal desire was somehow very love oriented without having to say it and that was lovely.
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this is a poem that shows passion and desire in a very elegant way. the imageries were clear enough and yet left plenty room to the reader's imagination. great vocabulary and flow.
thanks for the read LDF
SB
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I don’t know from where to start… what a detailed journey from a simple touch to the climax… I think this is the first one I’ve read on erotica category… I won’t deny that I didn’t like it… lol… it’s amazing that in a short session of passion how many different phases of sensations body go through… I think the beginning of the poem sets the scene appropriately…
Beneath a luminescent platinum glow
I lie, blanketed by fluid cobalt sheets;
you’re known for applying vocabulary to it’s best…
and the you’ve chosen the fitting picture too…
Definitely this has touched my senses some where deep…lol…
mina
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A dream made real
Goddess be my muse. Raven this is PURE poetry. I'm having a bit of trouble expressing myself over this one. The words caress and intoxicate. The images electrify and pulse behind one's eyes. Magic weaves a seductive spell in our ears. The best I have ever seen. -
Excellent to read such a poem that expresses passion with an intriguing vocabulary. I love all of it-every expression like 'quivering sinew', the illustration on the page, the temperature of it...
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this was absolutely beautiful, oh to make love in the moonlight you depicted the picture that you saw amazingly well, i cant see any fault with it at all. the passion, the emotion and the lust were all evident and you made me truly believe i was under the moonlight! well done! keep up the brilliant work! x x x
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Amazing!
Beautifully written! I don't usually go in for the erotic stuff (sometimes it can be very disappointing). You, however, have carried it off with both grace and eloquence. Your imagery is astounding. It flows so nicely all the way through. It grabbed me right off and held me to it till the end. Both your metephors and word usage are perfection. Truly a beautiful work of art! I loved it!!
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Magnificent!! Ahh, I love it. It has great energy. Great job!!
Love and Blessings, Ashlee -
WOW! what a great poem! you are a great writer! It is really great! the poem transitions and flows very well. You have a great imagination! the imagry and vocabulary used in this piece is wonderful as well. Keep up the great work! i really look forward to reading more of your work! superbe write!
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(Gets out the dictionary)...just kidding. WOW, this was an amazing write packed full of fresh imagery and imagination. I have to second one of the replies above that remarked about how tastefully this poem was presented. You certainly do have a great command over the english language and I envy you that. Wonderful write and best wishes
Ruth -
Damn! I need a smoke after reading this. It was better than sex, well, it's been a while, so it's better than my memory of sex, haha.
Seriuously, this was beautiful. Reminds me of the Romantic poets. I guess it is the a Romantic poem with a sensual twist. Great work. -
I really like this. I've found myself drawn to poetry like this lately. I like your choice of words. You make love beautiful again.
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thiswas simply stunning raven , it led me down a seldom travelled path in reading terms, your imagery and wording are enthralling to me, well done indeed...peace Terry
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Excellent
Erotica is not my normal read but having clicked on this I will comment. I found it to be extremely tastefully executed. It had almost a serenity about it. The act of making love is often spoilt by words, but I found this poem enhance beautifully your portrayal... Very nicely done
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aw! That was sooooooo beautiful. It was sensual without bad language. You managed to capture the beauty of it all with classy vcabulary. In cass you'd like to know my favourite part was the part that goes
You appear then, splashed by moonlight,
Piqued by bold displays of wanton flesh...
A vitreous gaze gleams with concupiscence,
Absorbing the lust brimming deep within;
This poem really painted a lovely picture. It was like everything was real and I was witnessing it. You have a way with words. I encourage you to continue to write. Good job!
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You know why I loved this?, it's very sensual without vulgairity,that is what I call class, you said it all with class, very nice write,like an adult fairy tail,it had a wistful feel about it,class write my friend, great, hugs D
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take a bow
this is a very good imaginative write and i loved every bit of it.normally i would do a fast read and give my opinion/thoughts but this time i didnt do that cause the title alone caught my eye and attention good write -
Now this is how an erotic poem should read! I personally consider erotica as being amongst the hardest form of poetry, because it is just too easy to fall into nothing more than straightforward description of sex and desire. However, the remarkable use of adjectives in this piece completely eviscerates that problem. Hell, the line "A vitreous gaze gleams with concupiscencee" by itself was worth the read. You also clearly take care with the imagery, starting with a vision of "a luminescent platinum glow," and ending with "Underneath the orb where we fuse together," bringing us full circle. The whole poem is nothing short of marvelous.
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Here I am again stealing time away... just so I could come and drink from the well-waters of your inspirations... magnificent as always which ever subject you chose to write about the thumbprint is unique one that reaches for the stars and finds always a new horizon... to blaze another trail... brava
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WOOHOO!! so thats what your were thinking about this morning as you sat in the chair by the window. Can I come back again tonight? oh please mistress please,lol. this was inticing to say the least and very lickable...i mean likeable.well done...peace
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OH wow...I'm out of breath. How did I make it here? I have my self blocking adult writings. However, you have done this very tastefully and with class. Not vulgar and uncouth.
Loved it...and now I think I shall have pleasant dreams.
Sam
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You came back steaming my friend! Wow, I can almost feel the heat here Will you tell us who is the source of your inspiration? No, OK, I understand
This is very good Aurora, sensual, excellent imageries, very teasing, romantic and has all the good ingredients necessary to an erotic but tasteful poem.
Very well done!
Kisses,
Mari
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clears throat writer's block? I think not. This is briliant and should be stamped with fan approval
Love the background, love the poem, love you 
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Perfect Romance!
Yes! This is tastefully appealing, romantic, sultry with a gentle splash of eroticism. Absolutely beautiful. Ahh to be assaulted by ravenous lips is every girls dream and let's not forget "Gesticulating fingers roaming quivering sinew" oh what magic, what ecstasy, what an awakening of the flesh. I loved it Raven, this is really breathless and a definite one for the bookmarks. I bow my head to you and your amazing literary skills. What a lovely comeback poem.
Keep them coming,
All my love,Avril (Big Sister)
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This is beautiful! Wow! I love the flow, the descriptions, it made me imagine, it made my blush, wonderful poem! Excellent write Luv Niky xxx
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And when she comes back she makes quite the dramatic entrance with her usual style and grace. You are such a literary tease my dear with your amazing command of the written word and the English language. Welcome Back my lovely sister! Sizzling and sensuous as ever. Try not to make us wait so long next time.
~Kimberly
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This is flawless...It seems that I just left an IM for someone that exhausted any other adjective I can imagine! FLAWLESS!
Welcome Back!
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