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Dose

you're like a drug that licked my pain
the pill that i love

but only you could make me feel
like i need another dose
to fill my cup

but only you can take me there
you got me denying myself

i'm so crazy
about the way you make me feel

i'm like an addict
and you're my addiction
only you could make me feel this way

i need a dose of you
to lick my pain

from you,
the pill that i love

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Written November 15th, 2004

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  • Darkside
    November 25, 2004
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    OH MY GOD YOU SCARE ME LOL well this poem is gooooooooodd I love it I can really relate to this poem hehehe and im not telling you how muhahahahahahahahhhhaaa hehe lala haha buahahahaha lol welll I loved it and keep writing and get on the internet you never are arg!!!! arg!!!! well I gtg maybe ok well I dont well gtg buh. . . what am i doing im not fucking finished yet I want to tell you that oh yes I dont know I think Im going to get drunk tonight hehe haha well what Shit what am I what Im god damn it my brain hurts now cause i dont even know what the fuck im doing well I guess I do have to go and do something or I guess whatever well gtg Love Ya lots and Dont drug yourself to much with your addition heheeh buh bye

  • crow69
    November 15, 2004
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    rawr!!!

  • crow69
    November 15, 2004
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    thank you very much.... your comment is appreciated.

  • SexyLiLblonde
    November 15, 2004
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    great expression! amazing poem...i can really relate! keep it up

  • crow69
    November 15, 2004
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    lol thanx. aww don't worry about me... i always tell you that.
    lol. hehehehehehehehehe cawwwwwwwwwwwwww! heehee.


  • liquidfire
    November 15, 2004
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    well........ this one scares me a bit......... ok im worried......... its a really good poem..... short though..... but good lol......srry im a bit out of it lol........love ya
    hillary

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