~Aun Existe Amor by Lonely at All poetry

Through the crowded clouds the rain fell
Over the thirsty floor of thy heart
On the land it flowed where you now dwell
Tearing the distances, from miles apart..

Oh the is sky so jovial, so hungry tonight
Let not the end be on you this soon
Far in the sea the beacon is shining bright
Over the moor, in the crystal eyes of moon..

Silent goodbye of the shadowed grey
Rays of brand new sun fall on the wet floor
Oh dear east wind, you have been long away
Now whispering in my ear aun existe amor..

Author notes

Written November 14th, 2004

A contest entry

For AP members, whose first language is NOT English (Contest) by Anna Emkah. 300 points, ended July 11, 2005, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Aun Ali
January 13, 2007

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Assalam Alaikum
Ha Ha I thought this one is on me written by some one I don't know. Anyways another Pakistani on AP, Assalam Alaikum. Nice to meet you.

Keep writing and let not the pen stop and when ever the pen touches the pad see that the writing must last long and become immortal in the pages of the minds and hearts. The immortal writing makes a poet immortal in hearts.

Allama Iqbal when wrote, he wrote for not today but for centuries to come. The Qudi that he wrote is still a mystery.

Qudi Ko Kar Baland Itna Ke Har Taqdir Se Pehle,
Quda Bande Se Qud Poochhay Bata Teri Raza Kya Hai.
Anna Emkah
June 28, 2005
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This is a very nice poem. It took me some time to really understand it, for you used quite a few metaphors, but after reading it a couple of times it became clear: you found love again! Well done.
Edited on Jul 09, 3:32 p.m. because 'judging'.
February 1, 2005
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I LOOOOVE IT
no... now i have to say that this poem is my favorite thus far. i love it so much! 'aun existe amor' i love the way you tied that into the last line. this is by far, the most eloquent poem you have ever written. i just adore it. the words remind me of a breeze, they are calming and just and flowing... beautiful. simply beautiful.
love love,
sabrina
Gwendolyn6
December 13, 2004
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Like a Warm Wind
Great structure without making it feel rigid! I also love the ideas in the poem.
FireGeck0
December 13, 2004
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This was such a lovely poem filled with a bitter end. It wass beautiful. The imagery you used made me see things as they were, made me feel like I was the one in the poem. Goodbyes come too soon, sometimes.
enlightenedatheist
December 13, 2004
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this is a love-filled poem of sweet remorsful longing. Dearest one I wish you the best of luck in you search for beloved east wind, remember that you are never truely alone. none of us ever are, i can assure you. remember that we are all meant to find our equals, it is the patience that we must possess first.
poeticweaver
December 13, 2004
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Excellent!
I love this piece my friend, and I'm so happy to see you penning so beautifully, I have been missing you, and this read made my day brighter, for I love the lines divine you piece entwine ever so lovely.

Thanks for sharing you!

Timothy The Poetic Weaver
PoemPete
December 13, 2004
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Pbbbbbbbbth.
Who haunts me from behind those flowers? How they taunt me with their cyclop eyes...always whispering about my computer skills! Oh, your poem? I didn't read it. Sorry.
indierose
December 13, 2004
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Wow!
This is brilliant... very well written. You've made a brilliant use of imagary. Keep up the wonderfull work.

Inie xx
BluexxEyes19
November 30, 2004
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Wow! This is beautiful! I loved it and it's good to see something new from you....If only I could come up with something as good as this but I got that writer's block again....Hope you are doing well!
Love, Megan
Lonely
November 21, 2004
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hahaha well surely you dont know Urdu.. and that the lang my bro used over there^^ Thanks for the comment Katie!

Lonely~
Beauty Sleeps
November 21, 2004
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I was reading that comment left by your brother, Eros, up until the part where he started typing some other language... then, I was lost.
This was a lovely write... I truly enjoyed your wonderful imagery, and I love how you always intergrate nature into your works. It just makes it that much more unique and beautiful.
Keep writing!
Kate
-In reply to that other language thing... oh yeah? I know karate... and SIX other Chinese words!!
Lonely
November 21, 2004
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Phoebe
November 21, 2004
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awww this is beautiful! it expresses a lovely emotion through gorgeous imagery and description. i really liked the last line, very beautiful and romantic i could feel the loooove in this one, keep it up!
xpoisonxgirlx
The Eros
November 19, 2004
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the title was Spanish right? wow i love the song "spanish Guitar" by toni braxton ...wow...ahem ..sorry i got a bit side tracked ok wellhere we go

LADIES AND GENTELMEN!

step right up and have a lookse!
the BEAUTIFUL background and lovely fitted words, for few you'll have to run and grab the dictionary but rest of it is pretty smooth to digest lol..

ok serious now, the best part was the last because of it excellent imagery capabilities, all in all the whole idea was ispired but pure, especially "the thirsty floor of the heart" reminds me of desert, woh aik shair hay tu apun ka like

"hum tu ek ashk ko smjh batay thay kafee magar

anjaan thay kay sehra main tu derya bhi smoo jatay hain"

that part reminded me of my own poem...actually gazal

and the line
"Over the moor, in the crystal eyes of moon"

was my favorite!
in a nut shell poem is a hoplessly hopeful!
nemo
November 17, 2004
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Oh dear east wind, you have been long away
Now whispering in my ear aun existe amor...

Love this poem...Reall an outstanding piece from you...Its nice to see taht you keep writting those wonderful poems of yours...

sajonara
dementedsoul05
November 16, 2004
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This is a very beautiful poem i love how you are able the give a description that can be so vast
"Silent goodbye of the shadowed grey"
I just love that line!!! i can so so many thing in my imagation from that line.......n-e-wayz great write and keep on doing so!!!!
Almighty Aphrodite
November 15, 2004
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Celine Dion has to be one of the most famous performing artists ever...but unfortunately, not one of my favorites I do like this poem, though... music always seems to inspire me; it's just that for some reason my words do not want to come out right at this moment in time, ugh I absolutely adore the images here... everything is not only beautiful, but illuminated in the light of love. What a wonderful poem! I have missed your work, so very glad to see a new one, mon cherie! Now pray that the wheels in my head start turning, I need some kind of inspiration!

Many blessings,

Raven Aurora ("Momma")
Becky2141
November 15, 2004
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That was super!! It was sad, but at the same time sweet and romantic. Very touching...keep up the great work!!
-becky
Willow
November 15, 2004
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You write so beautifully sis, that I now have many favorite poems written by you. You always touch my heart. This poem is no exception.

~Willow~
Lonely
November 15, 2004
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Yep I have heard that beautiful song by celine! and i wrote this poem after getting inspired by that song too. Thanks for the comment mina!
mina nagi
November 14, 2004
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The title reminds me of a song by Celine Dion... Aun Existe Amor (Love Still Exists)... I liked the metaphors and personifications you used in this poem... "Tearing the distances, from miles apart" and
Oh dear east wind, you have been long away
Now whispering in my ear aun existe amour...
seherish this is simply wow... well written as always...
mina