back from retirement
my badge of office
so heavy now
the snow
upon my brow
before the men
a gentle ghost
of legends
Andrew Hide
12~11~04
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Tanka with wakiku.
Written November 12th, 2004
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Thank you so much for the link in reply to Myron. That is brilliant and so informative. I'm learning so much on AP and from you, THANK "YOU"
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A grey head is a crown of glory. That is the first thought that came to mind. And then there was the image of a young detective going to the home of a retired great to seek advice. (too much American TV).
I have read this and then the but describing this style and then reread. I like this, and I can see where atrue understanding of haiku is needed to write one.
well done. this presents an image that will mean something different to each who reads it.
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Myron asked the question on my mind and after visiting simply haiku I see its definition reflected in what you have presented here. To me, it really completes the tanka, though completes is not exactly what I mean. But it does add another dimension to the whole poem. Certainly a nice model to study as well as enjoy. Thanks. Stu
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Thank you Myron,
A wakiku is a side verse usually associated with renga. A good description of how wakiku can be utilised can be found in simply haiku www.poetrylives.com/SimplyHaiku/SHv2n1/renku/beginnings.html
In this sample I was experimenting with its use as an exptra verse to show an on-looking perspective (still in tanka style using just one ku.)
Hope this helps
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depth
thank ya for the tanka...at first i thought it was sad, but now i think there's a lot more depth to it...
what is a wakiku? this one reads like a haiku without concrete sense images... -
I don't exactly understand the meaning of this write, but it was well written and I think it has something to do with a metaphor for some reason...Anyway, keep writing.
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excellent
this is really good work here Andrew.. I like the way you describe the heaviness of the heart.. Great write keep writing
Lonely~
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