On the surface, there is a woman
who is broken, lonely and often so afraid.
She is weak and bound by the chains of her life.
There are so many things of which she needs and dreams.
Her desires are rarely fulfilled, her needs left unattended;
Leaving her heart crying out for so much more.
Just beneath the surface, there is a woman,
who is self reliant and believes in herself.
She is dependable, unfailing, and deeply motivated.
There are only a few things of which she dreams, but does not have;
Leaving her heart somewhat content and satisfied.
Deep inside, there is a woman,
who is everything she wants and needs to be.
She is strong, passionate and complete.
There is nothing more she could want,
for her every desire is fulfilled and her every need met
Leaving her heart, brimming with all the love and happiness,
of which one can only dream.
Author notes
This poem reflects me from the outside to the inside. If I could only peel away the layers of what life leaves upon me,
I could be so much more to myself and to others.
Written November 10th, 2004
A contest entry
- Who Are You ? by europhoicx.
305 points, ended November 11, 2004, 17 entries
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its amazing what you get sent to, i reply to your comment on 'tired' and end up here, the idea of working with what you have and change, is it possible or not. you link up these themes and more in this piece, and i can understand how your inside doesnt come out, even so that is what you want, it seems life can throw so much at us and often what we want is what is left behind, locked away behind layers of 'life'
a well written piece, which i believe so many can relate to. -
why can't the inside you shine out? if you are that confident and satisfied on the inside then nothing should burden you on the outside.
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This is really good. I like the way each stanza gets deeper and deeper inside the person.
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Nice piece of writing, with a depth of self-reflection that's admirable...I'm a little confused as to why the woman on the surface would seem so anguished if the inner (or true) woman is so satisfied? Despite my slight confusion, the piece reads well and has an uplifting quality that is nice...
Well done, and good luck in the contest... -
This was great! I loved reading this! The layers of your self being, its great. It shows who you think yo are, skin deep. I liked the flow adn rhyming scheme. Good luck in the contest!
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I like this alot. It's like, tells you that you can't judge a book by it's conver. Good luck in the contest!
Europhoic <3 -
John...thanks to you also. Your words of encouragement mean much...and I appreciate you or anyone who takes the time to read my works.
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thanks chris...kindness goes so far...and I am glad you caught the meaning of this special piece.
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Yeah, the description says it all. I like how it progresses from anguish, to feeling merely adequate, to satisfaction. That is a good device. Excellent job, and keep writing.
~Chris -
Excellent
Hi,
This was absolutely well written my friend. This was an insightful introspection. I can relate to the first part of this. This certainy was an interesting piece, and I thank you for sharing it. Good luck in the contest!
--Johnny
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