Let me taste the sweet nectar that is you
And hear your sigh upon the wind
Spread your petals and surrender to me
Let me taste the sweet nectar that is you
Let me kiss away the morning dew drops
Intoxicate me with your lovely scent
Let me taste the sweet nectar that is you
And hear your sigh upon the wind...
Author notes
Written November 9th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Form Poetry Contest by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended November 10, 2005, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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hmmm. What can I say about this. Very tastefully written. I think that you have a way with words.
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wonderful
i love it...
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A skillful take on the triolet form. I myself have not ever taken the challenge of writing one, but i am fimiliar with them and i like what i see here
This triolet is beautiful in its simplicity. Passionate, arousing and inticing. Liked the visuals too.
Beautifully Penned
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delicious
This is a very romantic write. I loved it. -
i think it was sweet and passionate... i really liked it
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wow. i love it. keep it up
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Thank you for such kind words on my entry. I really appreciate them.
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Thank you for your kind words. I think this was one of my first ones when it came to triolet. Good luck with judging the contest.
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Succinct & sensual penning, Rose Dark Thorn...well done...Good luck in the contest...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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The repetition is what I love about this form, especially when you are able to find that one verse that doesn't become simply redundant in the writing. I wouldn't mind seeing lines that don't end with such an obvious natural pause, but admittedly, that is extremely hard to do with a form as short and simple as this one. Lovely work.
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It's called a triolet, my dear. It is amde up of eight lines that repeat the first and second lines in certain places, like this:
first line
second line
third line
first line
fifth line
sixth line
first line
second line
Thank you for your kind words and your applause.
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i have no idea about what form this is but you have created some special verse here
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OOOoOoO! i like this! short, beautiful imagery and oh dear im so excited! this is so good!! damn it! this contest is getting so hard
but anyway beautiful describtions and you made the erotic side of it so gentle and tender loving 
thank you so much for entering
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beautiful write so sutle just so wonderful...it just gave chills of pretty sweetness...and budding passion needs. nicely, sweetly done.
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amazing!!!
WOW, this is nice. It can be taken in diferent ways too.
It could be...
romantic,
Erotic,
spiritaul,
or even Hopeful, well, if you believe in god anyways.
(sorry, not me)
LOL
anyway,
great write and good job.
Keep up the good work!
~PhotoGoth
Edited on Nov 09, 6:47 p.m. because 'because the poem is worth editing for'. -
oo cutsie and kinda sensual... definately mild though suggestive
"Let me kiss away the morning dew drops"
particularly love that... both sensual, romantic... *sighs* beautiful
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awww this is really romantic and sweet, yet erotic in a suttle way! I really enjoyed reading this!
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