How creatively we divine
morality of our own design.
No objective wrong or write;
conscience is sola sight.
We are the branches and the vine;
experience and wisdom intertwined.
Acculturation as our light
shines brightly through personal plight.
but imagine with me now, your childs' fight...
Envision your child being raped
a growing vine with a twisted shape
Moral relativism, the perfect acquitment
there is no room for admonishment,
for the man has decided his 'wee small voice'
is teaching him to make the right choice
You can't accuse others of wrong doing
if moral relativism is what you're pursuing.
There is no abhorrent reality
if relativism is your morality.
Author notes
Written November 9th, 2004
Mispelling in line three is a purposeful wrong, to get my point across at how ridiculous relativism is.
Most people who decide to follow their heart rather than head are basing their decison on the idea of relativism- no actual right or wrong exists. They may not realize this- that all they are doing is following a popular philosophy that has become a fad- and ingrained in everything these days- but it is true- and it has dire consequences- it is the same thinking a phedophile uses to rationalize abuse.
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Well-written. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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this is one that takes time to let it all set in and then savor it for a while
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Interesting. Philosophical and thoughtful, and extremely well written. ^_^ Well done.
Thanks for entering,
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An excellent choice of words with a well-done rhyme scheme that is barely even noticable due to the exquisite job you have done with spinning your words onto the page. It's very obvious that you put effort into this and it really shows well. You take the reader on journey of poetry, through new experiences and new ways to say things, in an abstract manner, you create a whole other world for us to explore without even having to leave the poem itself, you create everything for us right in front of our eyes. As we weave through each line we become more and more involved and taken in, making this piece a very delectable poem with a solid ground to stand on. Original and thought-provoking.
much love,
James
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Makes ya think!
Hmmm.. I'm thinking about what I've just read.. not sure I quite get it. I know that my morality has taken a major nosedive and cost me some friends, and yet I feel like my choices are the right ones for me at this point in my life. Thanks for posting this piece. It's got the wheels in my head turning and is helping me to come to terms with the loss I feel in my heart.
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I used 'write' on purpose to try to make a point, but I don't think it worked
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Oh tug at my heart. This is great and painful to read. Such an interesting waying of putting something so painful into such beautiful words.
'No objective wrong or write' did you mean write or right?
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very nicely penned...i got alot from shamiks first comment..lol..to understand it more...very nice...a smart poem..creative...all together good...enjoyed...was worth the read
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Thanks for putting me on your favorites.
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yeah..an' you are in mah favourites list...
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well I guess it depends on your definition of a poet. Everything I do is practice, and 76 poems later I am just beginning to actually systematically learn...
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Wonderfully worded...your works are coming forward in leaps and bounds...you once said you weren't a poet( or something similar)....you will have to scrap that lable now.....very very well done and further more insightful...thanks you for sharing
dark search -
Well said.
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This is brilliant if for no other reason than that it says plainly what many are afraid to say. The third and forth lines in particular are masterful. The final two lines are a truth no relativist can refute, try as they might. I salute you on this one.
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very good
Hi Duana,
The poems in this contest were judged on spelling, grammar, punctuation, vocabulary, flow, tools, visual, emotional, and enjoyment. The biggest area you could have made improvements in would have been punctution which would have also improved flow. Final grade: 4,4,2,4,3,4,3,3,4 = 31 (+5) Definitely a much better poem than the original.
One thought for the lines:
but imagine now, your childs' fight...
How about:
but imagine now, your childs' fight...
Envision it with me:
your child being raped
(this brings the "other" into the same picture as the parent.)
John
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yes, you got it exactly as I intemded. I erealize not all my readers would get it, but those who have studied theology would.
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I hate relativism even though I am an atheist. Imagine a person saying that a baby being cut into pieces can be wrong for me but right for the person doing it.Gosh...the poem is strong with the ironic use of biblical and traditional usage like sola sight(from the three sola's of the reformation sola scriptura, sola fide and sola gratia), the vine and branches(the twisting horriffies me) and the 'wee small voice' from the still small voice that Elijah heard after running from Jezebel(the image of relativism) and the 'wee small voice' the so called comfort for relativists.
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