Bite down
on me
I wanna feel your teeth,
I wanna
feel your tongue
and the warmth it brings
oh, everything
that has to do with you.
The way your mouth moves
up and down
my arm,
I close my eyes
it feels so nice,
pleasure in this pain.
Do it again.
Draw blood next time.
I wanna feel it on my skin
before you lick it up,
just let me have a taste.
And every time
I pull your hair
I wanna hear you scream,
call out to me.
Bite harder now.
I'll match my moans
to yours,
such a primal sound,
like wolves out on the prowl.
Tear off all my clothes
I wanna be exposed
like Eve before she ate.
Don't be
ashamed of this,
embrace pure bliss,
my legs around your waist.
Passionate kiss,
my fingertips
tracing your lips
before you take a bite.
It's alright,
I get pleasure from this pain.
Keep it coming.
Don't hold back this time.
I wanna
feel alive.
This is a high
you can't get from a drug.
This isn't love,
it is survival.
Like a child
I want more.
I know you need it too,
it emanates
from you
when you look at me,
absorb my energy,
it helps you
stay alive,
and baby,
it helps me,
it helps me die.
Author notes
Written November 8th, 2004
A contest entry
- Tease me by requiempoet.
345 points, ended June 23, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Toxic Lesson by Coco Mara.
510 points, ended October 22, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Erotic Halloween by irishmidnight.
425 points, ended October 23, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seduce me by im dead - go away.
460 points, ended December 29, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I am pleased you intend to revise this poem as it certainly needs it. Any particular reason why ya gotta say wanna, like, know what I mean?
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I do not intend to revise this is any way. The speech is for the flow, and it stays.
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Seems a good idea to delete it from my contest as I detest illiteracy.
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I like it. The way the poem flows, the wording, the feeling; it all works very well. I could feel and hear it as I read it. It really expresses the intensity of kink, which most vanillas really can't understand. A lot of strong qualities in this piece. Good job.
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i love the way that this grabs at the imagination without telling us all... well done on a fantastic piece
cheers
Jen
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Very dark and primal. Good write. I like the form of using the short lines adds so much more longing and lust to the piece. Thanks for sharing it and congrats on the silver trophies, well deserved.
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I loved this...it is very well done. I loved the line "such a primal sound,
like wolves out on the prowl."
Great job!
**Master Ktulu**
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This is basically exactly what I wanted!! It's hotta nd sexxy and dark...perfect...and it's a great write...good luck babe!!!
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I like this poem. Its very dark and sexy. Its simple. I like how you made your poem stronger by adding sentances in the bold type and in that italiacs, it helps the bring the piece out more. Thank you for entering
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hehe
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LOL hehe
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do I know you?! This is alot like what I'd write...fabulous! You've captured the mind of me...scary! good luck in the contest!
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Also enter an original...okay. And I forgot the quote so I left it on your contest page. Besides, if I edit the poem I will lose the italics and bold, and I don't want that.
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Okay, I'd hate to disqualify you for not following the rules, so please don't make me do that. I don't see your quote, and my rule of thumb about pre-writes, is that if you submit one, which is fine, please also enter an original for the contest. Thank you. ~willow
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ha ha this is great....it reminded me of myself...i love absolutely love when my b/f bites me anywhere....awww....great write!!!!!!!!
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Mmmmm, yummy. I too, like, no, love, to be bitten. I too, take pleasure from the pain, and can only beg for more. Great job, and good luck! ~willow
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Tis a good write. Though it was a little hard to see the writing, all and all it was nice. Keep up the work, and hope to read more of your work in the future. I bid you adieu.
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intersting! yoou should change the font color to a brighter red because it's hard to see & there fore it's hard to read
other then that i have no complaints about the poem
the fow was exceltn and the rhythm went well
i LOVE blod it's the most amazing thing EVER i love being bitten and bigthing into anoter's skin and sucking o it untill blood rises into my mouth.... OHhhHH man that's good
there are a few places -veins -which cause intant orgasum hen bled and sucked on... hehehe and i know al of them
awesome poem i think you did an exceltn job!
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All I can say is DAMN! and WOW!
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why thank you =)
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Thank you! I has some reservations when posting this, but decided to anyway. I'm glad you enjoyed =D
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such a primal sound,
like wolves out on the prowl.
I like these lines here excellent piece! This is one amazing Write! You make it erotic without getting into every unspeakable detail! This has taste and class! The flow was excellent and it was easy to read understand and follow! Great job! Keep it UP! -
you got me so intrigue with what you wrote here...
your emotions are so strong...like you can almost hear the sound in every words reverberating on the mind...this can make anyone throb
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...yeah..
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okkie doke
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...and then i can explain what Ashley meant by what she said
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woohoo! does pot-stir
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teehee...my cell works now...you wont miss me ANYMORE!!!!!!!
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=D I miss you! lol
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^.^ yes yes yes !.!
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teehee *dances*
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loves ya! ^.^
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woooooooooow i like this a lot...im speechless so what i shall do is applaud...hopefully the 5 points you receive as a result of my applause will hint to you my admiration of this poetry. hee hee. blessed be.
anyonita
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^.^
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yes...so...?!
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Yes I am...doncha love me for it, though?
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*drools profusely* ...omg..DAMNIT!! now im horny..YOU ARE EVIL!
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the visiuals are nice love..
the poem is great..
and mmmmmmmm.. drools visuals...
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Very awesome babe!!! You got some real talent there!! And that was one hot read! Love ya babe...
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