As we fight our way from our mother's womb,
we scream our loud arrival in a moment of exhilaration;
And, as we develop we are forever being told to hush,
as it offends the ears, this constant noise of youth;
We are guarded well, freedom comes at a premium;
Fail to meet the requirements and be grounded;
When romance taps us on the shoulder, we refrain
from childish things.... taking an adult view;
Freedom, is just around the corner, as the children
are finally raised and leaving the nest, or so we think;
Quietness reigns supreme.......but one wonders where
one had the time to fit everything in when the kids were small. Now, all time is spent doing things we found easy to do twenty five Years ago. Just the daily toil of shopping
and cleaning, running the house and gardening keeps
us prisoners in our own homes. Later as the twilight years approach we comfort ourselves with the knowledge that all worries will be taken from our hands, as we sit on the porch
of some kindly nursing home, sipping tea and reminiscing of the good old days; Still prisoners under watchful eyes of the
staff.....
And, when our time on this earth, evaporates, and we join with the heavenly host, I have to ask myself, am I finally free? or is that a guardian angel I see, third cloud from the left..................
Author notes
Written November 5th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- What Is Freedom? by Zaffen.
500 points, ended November 23, 2004, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Zaffen, I was delighted to enter this contest, fear not! I am delighted that the judging was so honest and true, It was how it should be and I will be the first to enter your next contest
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Excellent
Sweety, you are one of my faves and I truly enjoyed the poem.
Had I been the only judge..........I'd have gone crazy.
It was a very good poem and stood well amongst the competition that, to say the least, was fairly tough.
I thank you for entering, sorry you didn't win but there's always the next time.
If you decide to enter that is.
Be well;
Zaffen -
Thank you Freda I am delighted that this poem draws you back... rather like memories
Many thanks for your very kind words, I do appreciate them
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once again I have returned to read this piece...I like the flow and it so accurately describes one's journey through life...freedom is indeed a flaeeting thing...best of luck in the contest...
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Lol, thank you for finding the time, I know it is not always easy to sit and just read, but I do appreciate the effort it took Many thanks
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looky here- i've been sitting here all day trying to comment on this wonderful poem of yours...and everytime i start the blessed ppl at WORK keep harrassing me...like i'm supposed to actually work..the nerve.....
anywayz...this a very profound piece of work that compels one to look deeply at their notion of true freedom....and where their loyalties lay .....
thanks for sharing such a contemplative write......
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Lol, yes I also have heard of this if you check out my home page it tells you of my constraints but having said that my freedon is in my writing and it's the best kind of freedom All of my children have flown the nest (periodically) but the tiny's take their place Tis a mad house most of the time, but one I would never change
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Love this- actually but some strange quirk of fate I have the responsibility of children,(grown up lol) and those constraints that inhibit the 'freedom' to do what I want when I want,making me feel like a prisoner, but I always remember something I read 'You can take away my liberty, but you can never take away my freedom.'A great write, expressing perfectly that journey within the shafts.
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Many thanks for your kind wishes, they are appreciated
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LOL I love this write. Beautiful. I'll be back to re-read. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you Freda I am glad you enjoyed this poem through life's pathways. Many thanks for your kind words, they are appreciated
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a wonderful lifelong journey of contemplation and reflection ...well done freda
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Thank you , I am glad you enjoyed this, your words are appreciated
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Thank you I have to admit, I do have a rather warped sense of humour hence, the sarcasm...(I always remember my mom telling me that "Sarcasm was the lowest form of wit" but I have to disagree) I also like to see a little of it now and again Many thanks for your kind words, I do appreciate them
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Here is a very thoughtful poem...definately deserves being read. More than once. It definately makes the reader think and question the world. Nicely done.
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I simply loved the expressive thoughts you have here that posesses wit and smooth sarcasm that can only be pulled off here that are for me very valid indeed! Good job on a great piece of work!
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Thank you for your very kind words I do appreciate them
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great writing
very cute, very true, quite the charming read, great job, very thought provoking and I can't imagine a one of us whom has not felt the same at some point in life
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