The stars be callin’ for a storm a creepin along the coast
Not many’ll be a sailin’ tonight, cept for the few that’s ghost
Her heart as dark as night still wrapped in the sands cold grip
Not but a few feet away from the gutted remains of her ship
A beating it does drum like the lightning in the misty air
Booming ever louder until everyone around is suddenly aware
This storm isn’t natural nor is it even right
For the elvin maiden searches on this very night
A mortal soul she would take amongst the many drops of rain
All to soothe the longing in her heart of her fateful pirates pain
Her conscious recreates the moment she knew it was to late
When a rogue cannon ball ripped her ship and sealed her fate
Now she lies between the sand in a bed of shifting inky black
At the “Straits of Offering” with more than one heart in her sack.
Author notes
Written November 4th, 2004
A contest entry
- A Pirate's Life For Me by Mia Donna.
300 points, ended November 6, 2004, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks!
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Beautiful.
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Hehehe.....well to be honest I havent written any short stories so I dont know how I would be at it. Perhaps one day I will give it a try, though I think my attention span would hinder me. Either that or my thoughts would flood my mind and leave me with no place to start. Who knows, but it could be fun trying to find out. I do appreciate your great comment on this write, I have been trying to create, describe and give closure as of late with my writes. It was my pleasure to share and my appreciation for you leaving a comment. Thanx and take care.
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Oh my. you must be an excllent short story writer. You painted suc h vivid imagery and told such a wonderful story. Thank you for sharing
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Ah surely you jest, though the jest is appreciated. I hope that you dont find yourself beached though, but rather rowing through the many different writes you find here at AP. You are welcome to browse all you like through whatever you like upon my page and I hope you find yourself with a smile when you finish. Thanx, take care of Bob and you take care as well.
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Ahoy!!! I don't think I could have picked a better poem to have beached myself on...This is terrific! I very much look forward to reading your other writes. By the way, thank you so much for wishing Bob a long life...he appreciates it! Thank you for commenting...
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Thanx poweslave for reading through this and leaving your comments upon the page. I appreciate it. You do have a point there, actions and consequences, most never consider either of the two........lol. Thanx once agian and take care.
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Oo arr, shiver me timbers etc etc. What a delightful take of a ship that was. It was almost reminiscent of life, as in we live, we die. But then again, everything with an action and a consequence could have that said about it. Nice poem, very well done.
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lol yesss!!!
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I always appreciate folks a lookin at me writes, ye know aint too many of us pirates that can write, much less read what all the ruckuss is left by the way-farers. Thank ye kindly on the comment about the piece and I appreciate ye a takin the time to run the contest. Good luck to all and take ye care.
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Ah then its a pirate life for ye then there matey! Don this git-up and meet me by the gang plank and we shall head off into the unknowing of tommorow. I really appreciate your comment on this write and hope that the write itself has struck a cord with ya to delve into the misty sea. Thanks and take care.
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Nicolette, I had thought you were going to say that I was so-so.....lol. Which totally describes me..lol. No but really I do appreciate you reading through this write and envisioning the tale in that time. I hope that I dont trap anyones heart, just mearly cause it to skip a span and then continue on it course. I do appreciate your comment, thank you and take care.
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This was a very pretty poem. I can tell by the number of comments you received that many others liked it too. Thank you for entering!
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you know, you make me wanna be a pirate, despite the poor situation this poem describes lol great job! love the descriptions
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Saling words...
Hammer, you are so, so good at writing tales about the sea and pirates and this ballad is no exception! I like the mystery, the romance of the days of great sailing ships and when I want to read that, I just read the tales that spills from your pen....these words of inky black upon the sandy bed of paper! Very enjoyable, my friend - keep on writing these great tales and soon you'll have a few hearts in your sack!!
~ Nicolette
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Why thank you kindly......"Bows in a sweeping jesture, letting the plumes of his hat waft the air in between us before they touch the floor". I do appreciate a good pirates tale and more than that an agreable reader. Thank you for the comment and take care.
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You are too kind kjack. I guess I just enjoy pirates too much because it seems that I am never at a lose for words about them. I am trying to work on a few new ones but have been really busy with real life as of late. I hope to make it back among the poets before too long though. Thank you for reading and take care.
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You know I really can picture you with that scowl on your face as you storm down the cabin stairs lookin for a sailor to rip to shreds, and then you tie the unlucky one up and dangle him in front of the ship, oh yes I can see the joy and smile return to your face, you eyes light up and you get tingly all over......errr yeah matey I catch ya about the keel haulin. Thanx fer sharin yer waters wif me!
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Yes it has been hard to get on here long enough to put two coherent words together and make them rhyme these last couple of months. I hope to find some time sooner or later to get back to what I enjoy.......writing.
I really appreciate your comment macandrew. I am a sucker for a ballad or tale. I guess thats just the rogue in me.....lol.
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You are correct galfalfa, they could have at least waited for her to get at least one cup of coffee down.....lol. I was rolling when I got to the part about piss on it and going back to bed. You my dear are just too funny! I do appreciate the lovely comment and wish you all the best. Take care.
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What incredible talent you have, this was fabulous.
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Wow, what a story. I have missed reading any new work from you. What can I say, it was well worth the wait. This was perfect. I loved the ending of this pirates tale. Good luck in the contest. Excellent job.
becca
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Man i just hate it when a bloody cannon ball rips through me ship. It's just enough to make me cranky. The crew will pay today. May just have to keel haul a few of them Can you hear my crazy laugh Good luck in the contest. Me always enjoys a good pirate poem mate
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very good
Very nicely done. Been waiting awhile now for you to post something new.
A jolly good read.
John
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he shines - brilliant
You know, you get up in the morning, brush your teeth , have a coffee and try to get into the right frame of mind to get through your day when all of a sudden, out of friggin nowhere, a cannon ball hits the side of your ship. Now, I don't know about you , but that's enough to make me say...piss on it, I'm going back to bed!!!!! .
Seriously though HammeR this piece here is a wonderful showcase for your marvelous talent and imagination Bravo Sir!!!!
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