Five wise blind men decide to go to the zoo
Those refrained from vision can see through third eye
How does an elephant look, they had no clue.
How come the inner vision can they imply?
Maybe, they focus on one thing at a time
Each day in their lives, it’s something they defy.
First touched the round body and tried to climb
He thought, elephant is like a slimy wall
“It’s like a snake”, exclaimed the next on line.
It’s like a fan, it’s a trunk, NO; a rope small
Each of them were sure and totally obsessed
A wise man revealed, they’re all wrong after all.
In our society we think we know best
We compete to convince, and detest the rest.
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Author notes
Inspired by the story I read at school... looooong time ago...lol... I'm not sure, were five or six blind men?... never mind!
rhyming scheme
aba, bcb, cdc, ded, ee
each line 11 syllables ... Terza Rima can have 10 or 11 syllables...
Written November 4th, 2004
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- Fairy-Tales, Spirit-Tales And Tales-Of-Wisdom ... In Verse by maa.
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hahaha, my fried told me about this tale just yesterday ... I had heard of it, and she has promised me a conclusion ...
your way of putting this wisdom-tale into verse, is wonderful ... especially the concluding couplet, where you use this ancient story and apply it to day-to-day-life ...
you are right, we all are a bit (if not a lot) like those blind men, believing that a partial truth represents the totality of it ... you have offered us a precious reminder of of being attentive to this tendency of exclusive thinking ...
thank you for your participation,
all the best,
maa
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oh true...there is no way conclusions can be made until the big picture is known,unfortunately peoole often make very narrow judgements...
Muse -
i saw this and thought i must read minas becausue you always write uplifting and interesting things and you have done it again...its something to really think about
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Thank you wattle... I'm glad you liked it...
mina -
My mina - this is so thought provoking - I'm starting to think of you as 'rhyme with a message' (the thinking persons poet) - thank you
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Hi Mari, You're right, I'm enjoying the class... I'm a slow learner... I've to put twice much of an effort than a normal being...lol... I never realised there's so much in there to learn... thanx for your comments...
mina -
Mina, you are doing so good with rhymes!
All the last posts of yours show how dedicated you are and how you do enjoy the class!
This poem is very good and has a valuable message too.
Well done my friend
Kisses and love,
Mari
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excellent
very good...in meter, structure , and content
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