Rubber soles lightly caress faded tar
As the nonentities of holidays-past erode
And the memories flash and fade away
Like a spark in your outlet or a cheap explosion
From that black market firework you bought last year
Rubber soles lightly caress faded tar
While the raspberry dollars and trick-or-treat wrappers
Float peacefully and unnoticed in the autumn wind
The feathered wings beat from the extraordinary souls above
And the dizziness sets in once more
Rubber soles lightly caress faded tar
Where immature games are played over and again
Try to trip me and you die, you insensitive bitch
But it makes me sad to say that
So why do we laugh as if nothings wrong?
Rubber soles lightly caress faded tar
I'm pulling through again, maybe someone will be proud
Contemplating crazy things again, still
Will you still love me when I become something important?
That's always nice to know, anyway
Rubber soles lightly caress faded tar
Summer life committing suicide once more
What a dreadful sin, dying before you should
If your life is planned then so is damnation
You all got screwed over, insane schizophrenics
Author notes
I don't think..but I'll know if you're wrong
Written November 3rd, 2004
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its pretty awesome. i like the imagry and stuff. good write.
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Excellent metaphors! Love the title, and it is a really good write.
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I love this. It has a great laid back feeling, yet really defensive. Sort of like I don't give a shit, but you better not mess with me. A down to earth caring for the world, and for it's simple things, laughing a little when people go stupid... or something like that...
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hey thats awesome, in so many ways, and when a persons IQ is as limited as mine then no critique could possibly do this justice, so I am just going to say fantastic.x
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wow that was pretty awesome. i like the rubber soles thing, but the repitition gets kind of old...not to be mean, just constructive criticism. other than that, i was totally into it and i love the deepness!
thanks for commenting on my story, by the way.
always
blanket
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heh. i made it up while i was taking a walk to my friends place. i did/saw all that on my way there and back.
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Wow Nicole, this was deep, although I can't say I know what it's about. At first I thought it was about Halloween lol. I missed your writing. I almost forgot how good it was. Well, keep it up hun!(oh yeah, I got adopted!yay!)
Princess
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very good
i liked this one, made me think, lol, and it takes a lot to get me thinking, cuz im so slow, lol. but yah, good work, keep it up
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