I’m a hostage in my own cage,
Suffering from writer’s blockage,
Afflicted apathy aiding rage,
Sloppiness snoring scowling sage,
Chained brain inflicting pain,
Ambiguous thoughts; cloud or rain,
I shook it, bashed it, I’m exhausted,
I’ve gone rusty, crusty and frosted,
I’m a hostage in my own cage,
Suffering from writer’s blockage.
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Author notes
Written November 1st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Writer's Block by Desdmona.
600 points, ended March 27, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is well thought out. I like the rhyme and ending with the first stanza but sometimes the alliteration is distracting but I also think you get your message across. Good job and good luck. ~Des
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hmm......even though u were in writer's block i think you did pretty well..the thoughts, the rhyme are good here.....but definitely you are better when you are not in writer's block and your muse is flying higher n higher well done friend.
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The poem was well written, even though under writers block. The rhyme scheme worked, and the flow was steady. It was a great poem. But this wasnt exactlly what I was looking for, but good job! I liked this =)
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Congratulations
Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning the Bronze. Please forgive my tardiness in my acknowledgement of your accomplishment. I love this poem. I've felt trapped in my cage recently, lol. There isn't much I can say about it regarding the structure or rhyme that hasn't be said with more eloquence above. Congratulations again.
Amythest -
Your muse like to play the same game,
maybe she also has the same name.
Nice used words, good luck to you,
but I am in the same contest too.
~Sonja~ -
OMG, your comments are very encouraging and I'm feeling soooo honoured... even if I don't win ... I'll cherish your comments all the time like a trophy...
mina
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Impressive wording!
What cna one say about this poem of yours.
These lines I really found interesting...
Chained brain inflicting pain,
Ambiguous thoughts; cloud or rain,
The flow and the contrast to this poem is really ingenius. your words you written in your poem really added depth to the entry of my cotnest and also is quite an eye opener as well. I don't normally applaud poems when someone enters my contest but I have to say I am highly impressed. I can easily say you are among the winners at lest in my eyes and as for the other 2 judges we shall see. Great poem all round and beautifully worded and portayed. Good Luck and keep on writing
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I love it. We all have all these words running around inside our heads, it's how to get them down on paper.
And I like the rhyming. Half rhymes are tricky buggers to get down, and I think you've done it, by Jove.
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I like the rhyming scheme in this, but I don't like the usage of "Cage" and "Blockage". I don't really know why I don't like those, though. The third stanza is, by far, my favorite. It is so creative. The flow of this piece was quiet well. Good job.
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This is where I'm at right now. So bloody frustrating.
~Willow~ -
oh.. this was so true...... the writers block is really like a change..... and the second last line was really wonderful! great poem Mina! keep writing
Lonely~
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You? Nah, can't imagine you without words, I think that words just procreate themselves in your head.
Now, seriously, this poem is great and I feel the same way now and then. But because I talk more than I should, ideas come fast into my mind and from there they land on paper
Unblock you pen my friend, cause we can't miss your words!
K&L,
Mari
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great
i totally understand, although lately i seem to write constantly, on the down side, i've stopped talking so i still feel trapped inside my wall.
~Kate
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