The dying chill of an Autumn’s wind -
His breath of frost precedes Him.
He is coming to torture my soul -
Sebastian, my Dark Angel Mystic.
He bears the chains, my destiny’s sin -
Within His tenacious grasp.
I am torn between my desires -
Of fear, adoration, repulsion.
For Him, He taints my mind with His lies -
Beautiful and kind, loving.
Horrid and despicable, hating -
I long for His comforting deceit.
Willfully naive and complacent -
He feeds on my bleeding heart.
He drinks to my burning soul’s ashes -
Laughing at my insignificance.
He scorns me, always I ask for more -
Despising His every thought.
But helpless without His guiding hand -
Fighting to refuse the taunts He gives.
He hides in the shadows of my mind -
Whispering of false glories.
This tempest must be torn from my eyes -
My hands bound unable to escape.
Author notes
Please review this poem choice #1 scary thing is, is that this i believe to be true (to a point)
Written October 30th, 2004
A contest entry
- A Contest of Dark Proportions by BrokenSouledPoetess.
400 points, ended December 1, 2004, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ah I hadn't read your poetry for so long! This poem is just beautiful, so dark and enticing, I simply adore it! Impossible not to like it when it reminds me of fantasy stories I like to read -and used to write -. It is the perfect fusion of surrender, adoration, and dare I say, abuse to the weak? And all the time you can't help but feel you'd probably be just as lost for that mystic ~_^. Nevertheless, good piece dear! Be well!
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yowxa
NOOO iv already lost and i havent entered yet LOL, bloody hell this is GREAT! im gunna get on and read some more of your stuff, very good luck in the contest!
~chris
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DarkAnglMystic, my compliments on this piece. I sway to the words like torchsongs from the grave. I am honored to know that you embrace your fears and allow shadow and smoke to consume you but if even for a brief moment. Well done....
thank you and good luck
Spawn -
This definately covered the dark aspect of things. I couldn't help but notice that the name of the poem and your screen name are one in the same...does this mean that you and your muse are one in the same? I have noticed that mine sometimes are...more often than not. My muse is my dark side...maybe this holds true for you as well.
Nicely done.
Thank you for entering and good luck!
rain -
Wow
wow this piece is amazing very dark ,amazing write feel kinder familer that the one that cause you so much pain is the one you need the most !!! Well done hope u win
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10/10 (wow)
Well well!
Such a tasty piece you have here, a dark romance like to that of a burning rose.
I think as of yet you will win my friend
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