November
I found beauty today,
in the gutter.
In spilled oil
rainbowing and blossoming,
growing from the harsh
grey of the road.
It reminded me of Sylvia,
and of poppies.
Imagine this.
I was born a different person,
lived the other end of the road.
And walking past, in the other direction
the light would never have caught
and picked out my flower, my poem,
my petroleum discovery.
Would it then, this oil-stain,
have reminded me of work,
of labour, of long days, of loans,
of cigarettes and carbon monoxides?
Or of a woman, a bleeding heart?
I doubt it with a sigh;
is my end of the road really the better end?
Author notes
Written October 30th, 2004
What did you think
Comments
1 - 13 of 13
-
great poem! I really like it, you are very talented! Great poem! You should add a backround to it to make it more in depth and stuff, but what do I know! It is also super great as it is!!
Awesome joB!
-
A really powerful surreal incredible poem! such depth and inquisitive style! I loved this! well done!
-
read it... it's good
"I found beauty today,
in the gutter.
In spilled oil
rainbowing, blossoming;
grown from the harsh grey
of the road."
this is one hell of an expression... finding beauty in something that is apparantly ugly... something i would give anything to be able to write... lol... a marvellous job... but i think it can be bettered by excluding the " And, having thought all of this," line... this seems quite redundant since u have already given us your thoughts...
also it just came to me that the flow of the words "With a sigh I doubt it." can be smoothened if u write "i doubt it with a sigh"... putting the "sigh" at the line end heightens the significance of the word...
anyways a great write which i truly enjoyed
-
It was Slvyia Plath, a reference to Poppies in October (hence the title)
Edited on Sep 07, 6:00 p.m. because ''. -
totally freakin awesome
Nice flow of your poetry. I loved the first two lines of this poem. Totally awesome. Sylvia? As in Sylvia Plath?
If it is you're so totally awesome and you rock socks off a box. She's totally my favorite poet. Great work with this, keep it up.
Hell Angel -
You have such a talent for words! How beautifully written--about an oil spill yet. Hugs, Patricia
-
fab write, I like the imagery - it all seems to collaborate. Anyways on Stop! I suppose the words
S
t
o
p
and split segments e.g. torment ing. Anyways great write I look forward to see more of your works. -
This is a great poem...very imangitave descriptions. It seems to float all togethor well..and that's what makes it an enjoable poem to read. It was really well writtin.
-
metaphors in this rock.
ur style is class.
it really makes me think about things...like wow -
I loved the metaphors, such a unique style that reminds me slightly of my own.
It's well written, so unique and so... beautiful.
Well done, thank you for sharing. -
Amazing words "cinnamon-spider" The descriptive words were a plus for me.(I like descriptive words
) but the way the poem is written is perfect to me.Theres not one thing I would even bother to change about this.I enjoyed every line my eyes came across.This poem definately deserves more comments.Great work
-
I like this. *reminsinces absently* I can't tell why. It reminds me of my best friend and some of the stuff she writes. I don't know. It was just really good. I love the aesthetic idea you used in it. I won't give you that cheesy line of "good job" ....soooo...... I was blessed to read this.
-
ok
really like the start of this.....
Adding your comment:
1 - 13 of 13
7 old applause
