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Waiting

I'm sitting here drowning in a pool of my tears,
Night heightening the fact there's no excape from my fears.
I'm sitting here waiting for the pain to begin,
The murder of my soul that keeps drawing you in.

I'm sitting here rocking my body back and forth,
Waiting for the day you might show some remorse.
I'm sitting here clasping my head in my hands,
Wondering when the day will come that you'll finally understand.

I'm sitting here dreaming of my escape,
But that's all it ever will be: a dream, some faith.
I'm sitting here by myself, all on my own,
While my candle slowly dies in the eye of it's storm.

I'm sitting here waiting to be hit black and blue,
By the man I once loved, the man I'm married to.
I'm sitting here dreading what punishment it will be
For the sin of living my life as me.

Author notes

THIS POEM IS NOT PERSONAL AT ALL.

I saw part of a programme on TV about this subject a while back, this is where the inspiration came from. This is to all those who experience this: get out while you still can - you don't deserve this AT ALL. Be strong, there are people everywhere who will help you, you don't have to live like this.


Written October 27th, 2004

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  • Virginia Logsdon
    September 15, 2008
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    This is so sad! You show a good talent for one so young!


  • VanGoghNights
    February 15, 2006
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    Beautiful

    *CRIES* I really enjoyed this poem... you are a lovely writter!!! keep up the good work... Smooches !!!!!

  • Tudor Rose
    August 6, 2005
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    a really really sad poem, it looks like you havnt been on in a while, also you have chosen not to comment on my poetry in about a year or more, I wonder if that has something to do with the lies my ex posted to other people on here about me or not? doesnt matter if it is, just like to say, I think your an awesome poet and its a shame this latest poem of your had to be so sad, I hope your feeling better now, take care and God Bless


  • g r e y i s m
    May 29, 2005
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    this is a rather high impact write, it really gets you in the end.
    it is both powerful and effective.

    with best wishes,
    ~Lea


  • jaunty pill gold member
    May 18, 2005
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    Thank you ever-so-much for your comment on my poem, "of a thousand kings", I appreciate your feedback and was joyed to see that you liked it.

    I think you are a pretty well-written poet yourself. You use rhyme in such an effective way to communicate with your readers.

    Especially with a subject so easily exploited without any real depth, but you bring the emotions of these victims of abuse across so very wonderfully.

    You capture their souls in each and every word and that in and of itself is beautiful.

    I am so happy I have had the chance to stop by and read your work.

    much love,
    James


  • Lucky-Charm
    April 16, 2005
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    Aww,this is sad.So many women go through this abuse everyday,but its your choice to stay or move on,Nice write!!


  • ComeIn-VisitAwhile
    April 16, 2005
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    WOW, you should enter my contest. This is an AWESOME write. I was captivated by your words. This poem is a wonderful thing to have out there were everyone can read it. Hopfully it helps someone else in this type of situation also. You ought to check out some of my poetry. I have a couple of them about spousal abuse too. Your poem is full of great emotion and feeling. I can really see and feel what she is going through. Maybe, it's just because I've been there too. But I honestly think it's because you have a talent for putting your feelings down on paper. Keep up the great writing.


  • Amanda Smart
    April 16, 2005
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    truthful

    Your words touched apart of me I buried long ago. Hopefully it will open some eyes and hearts of the one who can help. Yes, it goes on all the time and the shame silences the lip. Look into the eyes of the one you think maybe abused and the answer will be screaming----Help Me---


  • Loosher
    April 16, 2005
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    OH sniffles This is so sad! Great great word choice and imagery. Very emotional, great alliteration, lovely metaphors, I really loved this!


  • darkangelcutter
    April 16, 2005
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    hey this poem is really good..love it
    keep this up if you ever need to talk i am here for you

  • believer2005
    April 16, 2005
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    Inspiring

    omgoodness this is so indescribable i think that this is one of the best writes i have read yet. i think that this poem shoud be put on signs and flyers and billboards everywhere. great, no incrediable write. i hope that many will be touched as they read this. Good luck and God bless.
    Jaid


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    April 16, 2005
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    This poem is amazing! I love the last line of the third verse. Incidentally, I never expected the revelation of the last verse. I really didn't know it was about a wife being beaten by her husband. Yoou truly deserve all those applauses you got. And here is but one more.

    Fantastic message. I have been beaten before, and I have gotten through to the other side. Thank you for writing this, it was incredible.


  • soulreaver666bb
    April 16, 2005
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    i know all to well the message of this poem except for one thing that it isn't the one i'm married to but ya. i am very glad that this isn't a personal experience for you. this was a great write. it expresses some of the feelings poeple go through. again great write. keep it up. GB and GGHL. ~~~Bec~~~

  • Son Of Sun
    April 16, 2005
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    Too much sadness that would make it a poetry of darkness, so many amazing words covered by charming meanings, each line can describe what you want to say, what you wish you would never feel, I wouldn't surprise when I know that you who wrote it, because I get used to read great poetry when I stop on your page

  • Tudor Rose
    January 26, 2005
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    absdolutely brilliant, fantastic, did you really write this, this is sooo totally awesome blue, a very well done to you

  • Virginia Logsdon
    January 26, 2005
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    very good!

    Very good!Good advice,too!I was in an abusive marraige.It was so bad,I will probably just stay single for the rest of my life.I've been abused by other people,too.I grew up being abused.It's a horrilble thing.I held physical violence in such horror,that I kind of went the reverse as a parent.I spoiled my child and gave in too much.I bought her tons of toys,because I never had enough toys.I went 380 degrees in the opposite direction.My abusive father was a mizer.I have always been a little too liberal with my spending.I just wanted to be whatever he was not!
    Edited on Jan 26, 2:05 p.m. because ''.

  • NoLuvNoChois
    January 1, 2005
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    Wow.. this is amazing. I love it.


  • Sara Bellem
    December 27, 2004
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    Woah! How did I miss this poem from you? This is amazing Sis! and I miss you When are you going to write a recent write? I love your poetry and its been a couple of months since you have done so. I'm sorry I missed this write, I hope to read another poem from you soon. Thank you for commenting on my column, it so nice to get a comment from you I miss that ---Sara


  • SuZyCuE
    December 16, 2004
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    This is a Excellent write. Its flow is wonderful and it is so full of emotion and sadness. Great Job


  • DreAmR07
    November 9, 2004
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    fantastic job on this write.. i loved it... you used your words so very well... its flow was perfect. this subject is that of a sad one... i have seen people take the abuse and they dont leave... anyway you did awesome.. keep it up... peace out.. DreamR


  • Scarlett silver member
    October 29, 2004
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    Hey! You're back!

    Yeah, I've written many a poem that have been completely inspired by something and not based on anything in my life -- but people still tend to wonder. Oh well. This is fantasic! I, personally, enjoyed the flow the most. However, certain phrases seemed just right for this piece. Again, awesome job and I'm so happy you're back!

    -A

  • Konstantine611
    October 29, 2004
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    great write

    This is a wonderful poem. It's well written and honest. I especially love the ending. Beautiful.
    -Kim

  • DevilsWrongHand
    October 28, 2004
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    great write

    I love this write. It took a lot of work to put this all together, i think. This is very well written. Keep up the great work.
    ~laura


  • prettyangeleyes
    October 28, 2004
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    Wow. That was awesome. it was really well written. Spoke of what some people actually do go thourgh. Good Job.
    Heather


  • ----michael----
    October 28, 2004
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    you got that to a t hon, well, from what I remember of my mom and step dads relationship, and that of a sister. well written. x


  • Hurdlergirl4
    October 27, 2004
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    Wow, Sad

    Wow, this poem is really good.. It is so sad when you read it. It seems like what happened with almost all of my boyfriends except for 2. Wow this is really deep poem and it's really good that you can speak your mind out in it. Keep up the great write!
    ~*Mal*~

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