All alone save for the shadow
when then the soul is denied
where is your poetry?
so speaks the Divine
to cause such weeping,
as when the Pious died
at La Rochelle
and Montsegur.
Such a jealous god
to hoard such lofty souls.
Bio-genesis notwithstanding
my mechanical heart
beats regularly
as though it were a metronome
measuring time,
save for the shadow,
the smoke curling
from the black fingers.
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Written October 26th, 2004
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Worm very moved, although it may be that I have Leonard Cohen on the stereo, I don't know.
Well I was writing an apology for a poem in October, and St Crispin's is in October, so I came here, to this awful Hallmark graphic background, which is probably Ironic, like the Casio backing tracks to Mr Cohen's latest Poetic offerings.
Galway Kinnell wrote a smashing one about Starfish, you know.
La Rochelle is my second home. Maybe cos I am used to feeling besieged. Always something heavy and valedictory about your pieces: hey lots of Saints' Days celebrated in France, nearly all died horribly, not all at the hands of the English. Maybe if you went to Google and did Famous Battles, you could have a series, one for each day of the Calendar.
The Shadow is very haunty, no verbosity, no no .... pruned right down to the bare biogenesis. Notwithstanding.
Liked your poem. -
i LOVE the phrasing. super well done. Also this really has great content...well done
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Hey. Lute poems all very weary at the moment though.
Very good but sad.
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the flicky stick, ticky-thing on my metronome snapped ages ago when i was ten or something when mum was trying to force me to practice. i hate them they sound like rocking chairs. - that bit when there's one in the poem very cool though - boom boom boom. sound image. hmph whats a soundy image called in poeticalisticisms then? i bet it has a name or something. who cares. this poem very lonely though - walking alone and you can even hear your own heart. yeah weepy. jesus. anyway
woah do you have a pacemaker then? can you feel it moving when they put it in?
there was the childrens book called pig heart boy and they sweapped his heart for the animals and it was beautiful and then he won a swimming competition
but smoking is nice -
Reads a bit old world/classical till the "Bio-genesis" bit which kind of threw me and changed the tone of the piece for me. Yep, we are all just cogs in the big wheel.
Figured i would stop by and leave a giggle...cuz you know me...always finding humor in everything! lol.
UB
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well, why break from fashion now, and not be near the top for comment. been a while since i read henry v. i got this awesome complete works of shakespeare for a buck the beginning of the summer it's big, published in 1936 .. and in it was (and still is) a review titled "Diffusing the Bard" with a review of Al Pacino playing Richard III at the Church of the Covenant on newbury street in boston, dated 1973. It's an interesting review which i won't bore you with here. Suffice it to say, obviously Al got better (don't you love dog day afternoon?) i've been kind of stuck on midsummer and merry wives of windsor .. also i saw the Complete Works of William Shakespeare (abridged) this summer twas (that was a type but i'll leave it because it looks good i think) VERY VERY hysterical.
i loved my metronome - although not for playing piano like it was purchased for but more to listen too and look at .. it was a wooden one pyramid shape made in Germany. I loved the tick tock of it and used to slide the little piece up and down and just listen to it's beating and read the corresponding big word that went along with its speed. but this mechnical heart reminds me of the tin man ..like the wizard gave the tin man a mechanical heart and the speech that went along with it ..
who is talking? i wonder. are you the irish dude? well, at least the bloody eyes are gone. and the scenery is a bit better..last time, because i'm not a nag, quit smoking.
cville.
Edited on Oct 26, 7:42 because 'somthing wrong'.
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