It was late on Halloween night
All the trick or treaters had gone home
She heard strange scratching on the window pane
And from outside something moaned!
She was waiting for her boyfriend
They were going to the Halloween Ball
He was already three hours late
And had never even given her a call
She was frightened and began to worry
Had something happened on his way to their date?
She paced across the creeking floor boards
How long would he make her wait?
The moon was full, the wind was howling
The shutters and tree branched banged
She jumped a mile up off her seat
When the door bell rang
Finally, she thought, he's here
She ran to open the door
As she did lightning lit the sky
And it began to pour
Suddenly a gruesome figure appeared
Beckoning her to follow
Reluctantly she went along
As it lead her out back to the hollow
The closer she got the louder the moans
She heard a woman's voice shreak!
She didn't want to go any closer
She didn't want to peak
But like an accident on the side of the road
She just couldn't look away
And in the rustling of the leaves
There her boyfriend lay
Half undressed he lie on the ground
Enthralled in the heat of passion with another
She gasped at the sight of what she just saw
Both of them she wanted to smother
I hope you enjoyed your treat my love
You'll get your trick -- she said with angered voice
There are consequences to your actions
When you make such a hurtful choice
Just as she said that and walked away
A tree branch broke, landing on the lovers heads
Then in the morning, in the light of day
Their bodies were both found dead!
Author notes
Written October 25th, 2004
A contest entry
- Scare us with a twist... (New Member Contest- October) by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended November 2, 2004, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow what an imagnative twist
I have to say though this reminded me a lil of the Scream movie in places... was that your inspiration? And what a dumb ass doing it near his g/f's house lol
Good luck and thanks for entering
Hayley x x -
Your rhyming was quite nice in this, though the flow was kind of lacking consistency. I really liked the message in this, because cheating always has it consequences, no matter what. I liked the ending. Pretty darn poetic, if you ask me.
~ John
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Not the ending I was expecting but boy what an ending!
Descriptive, a good story line every thing except the humour at the ending we required for the contest. A brilliant entry though all the same.
Welcome to AP
~Von~ -
I thought that was awesome! decribed very vividly. quiet a...interesting...ending lol but i still thought it was great.
-andrea- -
I agree with Hara it is quite the poem with vivid imagery
Thanks for entering and good luck
Welcome to AP and nice to meet you
Susan~~~ -
Great write! Quite an imagination! Just correct spelling on gruesome, Good luck in the contest! The endings so sad, LOL Ann
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