A killer's thoughts
Inside a killer's mind
A killer doesn't dream
All are left behind
When he kills
He doesnt think
His mind goes blank
Eyes that don't blink
When first blood
Is drawn
From the body
His mind is gone
How does he see?
How does he act?
When his mind
Is what his body lacked?
Subconsciously done
Another nights work done
A puppet master
Mentally there
In the mind
In his lair
Of eyes that never blink.......
( Again this not my usual genre but thought i would try something different let me know what you think)
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Written July 22nd, 2002
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this is a very chilling poem. this sent chills down my spine. i love it. i like it though. it is written as though you are the killer and you are telling us what it is like from experience or something. i really like this. you are an amazing and talented writer. you have a knack for it. i cannot imagine what would be going on in a killers mind. how did you do it? where did the idea come from? anyway, great job and keep it up.
shauni -
nicely wriiten, it seems as if we are reading the mind of the killer. nice!
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This is pretty good. I have a serial killer series. I have it posted on the horror group I think. Anyhow, it's good. Maybe you could try to dig deeper in the annals of a killers mind {it's easier than you think.} I like this. Continue with it!
~*Destiny*~ -
Nice Write. Interesting how you vision a killer as a faceless figure going through motions instead of a confused individual, but i liked that...
-cj -
*Cold Chillz* wonderfully written, I love your writing!
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I love this and to get inside the mind is a rare find~ Just taking a slice of what is there~Again rare~So much information to see what makes them tick~ I did a lot of reading on serial killers~ Very interesting indeed
~Keep on writing and getting the mind thinking 
~Awesome write~ Big hugs 
and much love~Desire
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I cannot imagine getting inside a killer's mind...and is there a mindset for a killer? Or is that a fine line we could All cross quite easily in a moment of rage, and face it, we all have them, some more than others? I don't think it is always a case of what the individual was lacking that he couldn't stop himself. So, so many of us are lucky we stopped just short of it....
Sarah aka rhiannon 11 -
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Excellent write. I really enjoyed this.
Ann -
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excellent! great imagery and the skeleton rocked as well! Loved it, chilling as it was, it was still a great poem! -
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it sent a shiver down my spine (the pic of the skeleton emphasized it)... this is amazing!!
thanks for the comment on my poem as well =)
*cryssie* -
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Wow, chilling poem. -
umm thanks
never thought of selling it Jon........
Blessings
Susan~~~~~~~
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Great write!In todays world blood and guts sell. Maybe this is your calling. Jon -
excellent
Have been a serial killer in a past life you are close.
So of us don't realize what they are doing , but me
I know very well and I love it...heheheehehehehehhe
Hugs...Eddy -
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i think you done very well indeed,, especialy since this is a total change of genre, thank you for sharing,, and I love the skelinton too....lol
take care now..steve -
excellent
How the heck did you get that huge skeleton on anyway?? My only crticism is that I wish there was more. What I like is the flow of the piece like a stream running through your head. -
excellent
Oooh...I like this a lot. Very thought-provoking. One does wonder what a killer thinks. Very good piece. -
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very comtemplative piece Blush.
I think CTD is correct... we are all potential killers. The question is... what keeps most of us from doing it? The answers are as varied as they are complex.
love things that make me think... and this piece did :)
*smiles
CM -
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I won't be in you kitchen when the blues start. Too real to feel up close. Great work. Thank you -tj- -
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that skeleton is way cool :)
a killer's thoughts,
we are all potential killers :) -
excellent
liked the photo oodles!!
liked the poem....
i do agree completely with birchwood here.. -
excellent
I think it is good ...
questions .. things we can't understand ..
how to emphasize with someone
who takes life like
he eats raisins? -
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No, it is not the usual you Susan. But you have covered this very well. You could say, right to the bone!
Sammy -
lol@ Gill
Blessings
susan~~~~~~ -
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Hides under the duvet...can I come out now...Great write..very different for you..I like it...~~~GILL~~~ -
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hum, very interesting poem i like it.. We can not alow ourselves to be bound by doing things in certain forms and genres because without variety we become bland and boring, this is a good way to lossen the mind up and help you be more open and relaxed with writing your poetry.
Friendly Neighbourhood Spiderman -
Thnaks you all
Thanks Vicki ia ms o tired seeing after my mom i think she had a slight stroke i am just plain tuckered out going all day and night i need a good 8 hrs sleep lol
Thanks for asking hon
Blessings
Susan~~~~~~~ -
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I muust say yes this is not your usaul write but you did
an incerdibile write, scares me alittle sent shivers down me spineha, ha. hope this fines you in excellent heatlh yourself -
Thanks Sheryl i read lots of horror and phchic killer novelguess thats where i get my ideas and no i am not repeat not a killer lol
Blessings
Susan~~~~
P.S.Thanks for the comment!
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My words exactly!! lol About the skeleton, COOL...dead bones! :)
This is so funny, because Sheer Poetry just wrote a psychothriller-type poem, 'Evil Thirst'...and I commented how hard it is to get inside a killer's mind, to know his every move and thought...in order to write, you must know these things, his motives...what makes him/her tick...and you seem to have grasped that nicely, only yours is more of a rhyming poem, short-n-sweet, hers is more of a story...but the end result is the same...you reach out to your audience by letting us inside your mind (the killer's mind)...which is VERY hard to do, unless you are a psychopathic killer yourself (geesh, hope NOT) LOL :) Get away from me!
But this is really good...and Mr. Bones is 'AWESOME'!! :) hehehe
Thanks for reading my poems...I'll read more of yours later...Sheryl -
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AWESOME SKELLYTON!!!! I love this poem
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