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The Fishermen And The Sea

A fisherman's boat on the mighty sea
Sways back and forth against the waves
Men with their lines in the water
Catching fish to earn their pay
Waves getting higher
Storm clouds up above
Turning around
Heading home
Nightfall
Comes
Now
Weary
And so tired
The men all prayed
As they thanked the Lord
For the catch of today
Far away they see the light
Of the old lighthouse near the shore
And they safely made it to the dock
As the storm suddenly started to roar


Author notes

I used the poem type of Ethere with the water theme.  I did a double Ethere starting from 10 to 1 then from 1 to 10 sylables.
Written October 23rd, 2004

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  • Samplette gold member
    November 3, 2004
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    A fisherman's boat on the mighty sea(10)
    Sways back and forth against the waves(8)
    Men with their lines in the water(8)
    Catching fish to earn their pay(7)
    Waves are getting higher(6)
    Storm clouds up above(5)
    Turning around(4)
    Heading home(3)
    Nightfall(2)
    Comes(1)
    Now(1)
    Weary(2)
    And so tired(3)
    The men all prayed(4)
    As they thanked the Lord(5)
    For the catch of today(6)
    Far away they see the light(7)
    Of the old lighthouse near the shore(8)
    And they safely made it to the dock(9)
    As the storm suddenly started to roar(10)

    As you see the second line is off, so this entry is disqualified. This was really a great write. Thanks for entering.




  • leannewales
    October 26, 2004
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    fantastic Bertie...so lyrical and descriptive...i'm so very happy to see your poetry posted again....hugs....leanne xxx


  • qnhoneybee
    October 25, 2004
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    This is a lovely Double Ethere. I am afraid of boats so I could imagine how relieved the fisherman would be to make it to the shore just before the storm came on but still they had a productive day.

    Thank-you for entering the contest!

  • Samplette gold member
    October 24, 2004
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    This is a beautiful Ethere piece. A calming feeling from being safe with the Lord watching us...using water makes it extra calming for it tells us once again how He can calm all storms in our life.
    Thank you so much for taking the time to enter our contest.
    Sam