i see myself
as the ocean deep
unpredictable at times
but still very unique
life on the surface
is plentiful too!
but the greatest part
i won't reveal to you
i have this fear
of not being enough
and when i feel threatened
i can be quite tough
the essence of me
i know to be true
is i am willing to learn
and expand in my truth
i love to be authentic
without wearing false masks
but still i hold on to some
just habits of the past
expressing my feelings
are easier said than done
but deep down i know
i am whole, i am one
the ocean holds beauty
both on top and below
and i'm ready to discover
my own oceans flow
Author notes
Just off the top of my head I was trying to describe myself to the reader. Not sure its any good but anyway love to hear any comments.
Written October 23rd, 2004
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i luv how u compared your life to an ocean thats just amazing and only a talented and brilliant person can think of that. you have once again stunned me with your beautiful words, rhythm,rhymes, and pictures u painted in the words. you are a truly great poet and it is amazing how good you are at poetry.
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Wow Richard, what an awesome comment. I believe everyone has the ability and potential to be as vast, abundant and encompassing as the ocean. Explorers in our own right for the beauty that lies within. I have a feeling when we find that place, we will finally realise how connected to all life forms we are. Thank you for such an inspiring comment.
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umm, (bear with me i'm thinking and typing--not easy for me)oceans are deep in some places and they seem to be shallow in other places...but where they seem shallow that is where the greatest energy is seen in the form of waves and the crashing pounding sounds of foam and swirl. The ocean's movements are vast, global, encompassing...your thoughts are as vast, maybe more...yeah, a lot more i think and they are encompassing so much of the wonder that you percieve around you. So much of the ocean remains unexplored to this day, you are just beginning your explorations into the deep places of mind and soul. The best part of who you are still reamains hidden, full of mystery, charged with energy...yet to be revealed. Well, that's what i got anyway; what i felt as i read this marvelous exploration of being. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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What a beautiful and encouraging comment. Thank you so much.
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Welcome!!! LOL Wanda 
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I hope you can tap into that wonderful and pure energy whenever you need it. You'll never know when someone will need to drink of you and if the water is sweet. that's where the souls will go. Peace Through Love. May your gifts always bring you to the source of all happiness. ET
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"i love to be authentic
without wearing false masks
but still i hold on to some
just habits of the past" I think this is excellent! You did a great job describing yourself to the reader. I love the flow here, you've done a great job (did I mention you did a great job?)
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Lovely to see your name come up. This site is so precious, especially when you put your heart out there and it is accepted for what it is. That is how I felt about your comment.
Thanks for dropping by. I miss being in this haven of poets.
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Oh shucks! I think I am actually blushing.
How wonderful to think you wrote a dud and to get such wonderful feedback. Thank you, thank you, thank you dear friend. -
This is incredible! Diane, you have done such a fantastic job of describing your feelings about yourself and how you see yourself...I could only wish to write something so meaningful...Truly you have a masterpiece with this write...All my best to you.
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What do ya mean, 'not sure if it's any good'??? Good griefyness, Diane...it is exquisite!!! This is an impeccable piece you've done...AND it rhymes, too!!! Oh, my Friend...this is an intrinsic poem...a Symphony of Self...very lovely...I once wrote the lines, '...You may think you know the Real Me ~ you only know what I let you see...'
My Friend...we all wear our lil' masks...but at least you admit to wearing yours!!! & It is your right to reveal only that which resides within your comfort zone, Sweetheart...you don't have to reveal anything at all!!! But I am so very grateful that we found each other, anyway... My Friend, Diane A Wondrous Woman...& a Great Human...not to mention, an awesome Poet!!! Brava!!! Wanda
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Thank you kind soul. I so appreciate your comment. Will go read yours now.
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WOW! I love this poem so much because I can relate to it! Great job! I mean it!
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