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Cyanide Layered “People”

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Strangers in their hours of darkness
Dirge of acute lonesomeness
Have they mislaid the will to wrestle awelessness?
Predators rejoin with hungry alacritous-ness

One brilliant shaft of “light” punctures their dark world
They mistake artificial light for the sun
Blinded, they eat false food titled ‘Layers of Love’
And promise not to tell

Until they die

 But who interviews a poor
Old prostitute?
They paid her (or him) to die
And they still have money

You can’t take it with you
But you DO take your cyanide with you....

Author notes

Just trying to honor and love
The so-called unlovable

Written October 23rd, 2004

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  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    August 8, 2005
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    Thanks for reading one of my older poems. Makes me go back and see where I was back then...
    Honor and love..."In the evening of life, we will be judged on
    love alone." St. John of the Cross

  • sweetdreams15
    August 7, 2005
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    God bless

    Great poem. very heartfelt and i think about under authors poems where u said trying to honor and love the so called unlovable. i think thats a wonderful statement

  • prodigalson180
    October 23, 2004
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    hey i like it, short and sweet, nice choice of words, but i didn't know what half of them ment


  • jaunty pill gold member
    October 23, 2004
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    Goodluck!
    Edited on Oct 23, 10:29 p.m. because ''.

  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    October 23, 2004
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    Thanks for taking the effort to make a poetic response. I'm doing my first Open Mic poetry tonight. Wish me luck? LOL!

  • jaunty pill gold member
    October 23, 2004
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    I see you have a little saying from tori amos on your page...very nice! She's a different one , especially through her lyrical content , very abstract , but then again , Precise in some of her plain emotions.

    Now this poem is something of a veritable joy pile of words. I find so many directions where I could jump and find nirvana under the curves and folds of this poem.

    Hiding away emotions and senses that vibrate the body and tease certain areas of the brain to push forward and think more, to ride on each stanza as if it were a wild bronco and try to find the secret eggs of mystery that are held deep inside.

    Excellent, mind-blowing piece.

    love to you,
    James


  • pulsating
    October 23, 2004
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    Very nicely written,
    your heart is drawn
    all over this and
    the message , clarity
    and depth are astounding.

    Great job~

    Take care

    olivia


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    October 23, 2004
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    Maybe I'll draw the nesses out.


  • MuseStalker
    October 23, 2004
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    Excellent

    Whoa...the intensity here is dizzying. I was particularly smitten with the lines: "Have they mislaid the will to wrestle awelessness?". It so perfectly describes something I've felt many times but didn't have the words for...I love it when poetry does that. It's as if you got inside my head and explained my own thoughts to me so that I could see them clearly for the first time. Wonderfully done imagery here. I didn't care too much for the "ness"es in the first stanza. In my opinion, it felt a bit awkward and detracted from the excellent message. But, as I say, that's just my opinion. This is - despite that - a very excellent piece of poetry.


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    October 23, 2004
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    I often spend more time looking for a pic than I do with writing the poem.

  • MollysWall
    October 23, 2004
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    Always thinking of the underdog... very interesting piece. I love the dark ending, it gave me chills! My favorite line was They mistake artificial light for the sun... I honestly think we all do that to an extent, Oh and that pic -ugh! Where do you find these things!
    Great job.
    ~M~


  • Redstormy gold member
    October 23, 2004
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    Darkly but wonderfully written my friend. Your work has taken a turn in a different direction than when I first began reading you. Interresting lines here.

    "But who interviews a poor
    Old prostitute?
    They paid her (or him) to die
    And they still have money"

    Red


  • anyonita jenea
    October 23, 2004
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    mmmmm i like this....haven't stopped by here in a while-feel kinda guilty...miss your works...i love the image along with this! one thing-you sent me scrambling for my dictionary with that first stanza hee hee blessed be.
    anyonita

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