Summer dies
on Winter’s battlefield
as her colourful fanfares disperse.
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Author notes
Written October 23rd, 2004
A contest entry
- Make me know... by poetryality.
500 points, ended October 24, 2004, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Good
The Battle of the Seasons
I won't let summer win says winter
I'll stomp that season; it will splinter
Then in a year it was back
Ready for another attack
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EXCELLANT
A magical rainbow leafy canvas woven on its seasonal melanchony
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A MAGICAL MELANCHONICAL SEASON WOVEN ON A LEAFY RAINBOW CANVAS.
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Good job in capturing the mood of encroahing winter - but I like it best when Spring wins out over the cold!!!
Best wishes,
Moses -
Beautiful, very.
Stephanie
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This is a haiku. I wasn't expecting that. Very nice. Wonderful pic too.
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thee pic and the poem are quite sweet!
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wow...between that most amazing polaroid and those words...i am blown clear away...this is the greatest thing i've read in a looooong time...wow...your talent amazes me....wonderful exceptional extraordinary write! blessed be!
anyonita -
I love this..so wonderful..even in the forced shortness...you really were descriptive and effective. I know summer has gone, fall is here...and winter will take over soon.
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Absolutely amazing! This is wonderfully written. Though short, I feel it is very very powerful. Best of luck in the contest CrimsonUniverse. Keep up the good work. I like reading your poetry. It makes me feel so at home somehow. Very nicely written once again. Blessed be.
Kristen -
Beautiful pic, wonderfully expressed and written, I just love this piece, you have a gift for this I see!
I wish you all the best within this contest, and it's nice reading you once again my friend! 
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver~
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This is lovely. Yes, I agree "fanfares disperse". And what fanfares indeed. I love the blowing leaves. Oh how they dance in the wind. This is exquisite, and surely allows all readers to experience Autumn. Thank you so much for this entry. It is a natural perfection!
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Jen
This is so lovely
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Karen
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Beautifully done!
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wow Jen, this rocks and I enjoyed the colorful imageary you paint the new season in with the selected wordage is impressive
Tamara
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With colourful fanfares I mean the leaves flying about on the
wind, not a season. So I will keep it as it is
But thank you
Jen
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You did a great job on this. It's not easy to describe such a vibrant season in just 10 words. I know, I tried this contest too. I loved the picture you painted. The only thing that gave me pause as far as your form were the words "fanfares disperse." Since autumn is a season and singular, I would think that "fanfare disperses" would seem more in line. Keep in mind I'm not an expert... but it was something that popped out at me. Good luck in the contest. ~ Patti ~
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Wonderful
This has such wonderful imagery! I can see the "battle" as it were and see the trees in my mind's eye. Too Cool!
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