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Autumn’s Splendor

 



Birdsong fills the crisp cool air

 

and echoes through the trees

 

it mingles with the rustling hues

 

as they whisper softly in the breeze.

 


Sunlight dapples on my skin

 

dancing in pure delight.

 

The flames that linger on the limbs

 

in shimmering rays ignite.

 


Shadows lengthen as the sun

 

sinks slowly toward the west;

 

and I shiver with impending gloom

 

as I quicken o’er my quest.

 


Somewhere ~ I can’t see them

 

ashen gardenias bloom.

 

Their heady scent overwhelms me

 

air thick with their perfume.

 


I curl my toes in ecstasy

 

crisp leaves beneath my feet

 

As I stand among this glory

 

I feel ~ almost complete.

 


Puddles gather radiance

 

and reflect it back at me

 

as we join, enthralled upon the path;

 

littered with fall’s debris

 


I savor your piquant hungry lips

 

conveying love that will not cease;

 

and here upon this forest floor

 

I unearth ~ perfect peace.

 




Patricia Gibson-Williams

 

October 23, 2004

Author notes

I loved the picture for this contest, I tried to go to sleep after I saw, but it kept calling for me to write a poem about it.  When I started on the path I had no idea where I was going to end up.  But here is where my journey lead me.  I hope you like it.

I suggest you look at the picture and read Onyx Dragon's poem.  It was filled with wonderful descriptions, that tickled the senses.  I hesitate to point out any particular phrases that touched me because I don't want to spoil your outing.  Let’s just say I felt as if I really was standing there enjoying the sights and scents and sounds.  

Thank you Onyx for the inspiration.
~ Patti ~



Written October 23rd, 2004

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  • sweetestkiss1985
    November 14, 2004
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    beautiful and exquisit

    Thsi is a lovely description of how autumn is. I think that autumn is a beautiful season and should not be taken for granted for it's coolness. God made all the different colors of the trees to entertain us for He didn't want us to be bord with the senery of this world. Great write. I felt as if I was there.
    Rebekah


  • enymatik90-09
    November 11, 2004
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    Bravo my friend! this wa well written!
    i wish i cood say more bu', for i am speechless.....


  • poetryality silver member
    October 28, 2004
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    Very soft, subtle and peaceful poem here. This makes me want to come and stay, and stay, and stay... Just beautiful. Good luck to you in the contest

    Renee


  • October 26, 2004
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    wow, my jaw dropped to the floor as i read this. this is truely the perfect piece for the picture. your use of imagery and detail is quite amazing. i hope you win this contest! (funny thing to say, since i'm in it as well. it is just that good.) i love this, and i wish you the best of luck.


  • Ava Noire silver member
    October 26, 2004
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    This is just beautiful That last stanza was my favorite. What a perfect way to end this stunning journey!

    In one of the stanzas you have "air think" I think you mean "air thick." Its so easy to miss those! Good luck - this was a delight to read. It needs more comments so I will promote for you

  • keljoed
    October 23, 2004
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    peaceful

    It put me in a peace. wonderful poem. Very descriptive and very relaxing. I enjoyed reading it very much. My fav part:
    I curl my toes in ecstasy


    crisp leaves beneath my feet


    As I stand among this glory


    I feel ~ almost complete.
    I loved it. It was just so amazingly awsome.
    Keep doing what you do.
    Later Days
    Kelli


  • Lovely Luci
    October 23, 2004
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    A pleasure to read

    Love the way you worded this piece. It kind of brings a peace and tranquility into your mind and heart, like there isn't anything wrong with the world. Good job, and a pleasure to read


  • Mythtress
    October 23, 2004
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    Lovely imagery. Inspired. The brilliance of autumn --- it's changes, it's promise, it's peace...well conveyed in this poem.


  • quietly burning
    October 23, 2004
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    nice poem .. serene and tranquil. some things end with autumn, but love continues along down the path

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