Twilight approaches the purplish skies,
a rush of wind floats softly by,
another lonely day missing you,
another day wishing I could die.
The tide is rising, death is rolling in,
beckoning to my shattered heart,
my mind no longer lingers in reality,
my final moments are about to start.
THE CLOCK IS TICKING
The evening sun reflects across the bay,
a full moon is on the rise,
my final sunset is so captivating,
tears now flow, it is time for good bye.
My heart stopped beating long ago
every part of me has already died,
only a shell of a woman is standing here,
the sea will take my emptiness left inside.
I SURRENDER
As I take my first step I feel peaceful,
the ocean has begun it's hold on me,
it is now time, I close my eyes,
I am free, I have found tranquility.
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I'll Be Here by Mark Klinka
Written October 23rd, 2004
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Thank you so much for the lovely comment. It is appreciated. Take care, Sandy
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This was really great. I loved it!
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Thank you for reading my poem and leaving a nice comment. It is appreciated. Take care, Sandy
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i really like this... i liked how you used the sea as death.. i think thats wut u did anyway... but i did like it. great job... keep it up.. thanks for entering
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this is a good write, but thelines are kinda choppy
otherwise this is a good write, thanx for entering my contest
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Kim xxxxx
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This was so sad, so beautiful.... it also resembled my very feelings, such a touching write. You've done a realy great job of expression here.
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Thank you so much for entering and I enjoyed your poem greatly. Great emotions and wonderful descriptions. Peace! -
Gosh thank you so much for your nice comment. I do appreciate it. I will read some more of your poem. Take care, Sandy
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Sandy, this is beautiful, touches the heart, you are an excellent writer. Very descriptive once again! Ann
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Thank you for reading my poem. I appreciated your nice comments. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you for reading my poem and leaving a nice comment. It is most appreciated. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you for reading my poem and leaving a nice comment. Take care, Sandy
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I want to thank you for reading my poem and leaving a nice comment. It is most appreciated. Take care, Sandy
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I want to thank you for reading my poem and leaving a nice comment. It is most appreciated. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you Tamara for the kind words. It was a time in my life when I was young and foolish. I have the Lord tp guide me now. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you so much Serena. I appreciate your lovely comments.I guess into each life a little rain must fall. God is blessing me now. Take care, Sandy
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Thank you for reading my poem and leaving such a nice comment. Yes this was many years ago when I was a young and foolish girl. Take care, Sandy
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How sad great write Sandy just like always. I'm glad your life is better know. Love Serena*
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beautiful imageary yes, but I am so glad your surrender was for the Lord and not the captivating Sea to wash you away for all eternity.
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This is so touching Sandy. You have moved my heart this morning with your words. I think in everyone's life there are moments when we think about such things, but thanks goodness, you and many, many others do not act upon such impulses. You are here for a reason and your life has a purpose. Nobody is dead wood, even though we may feel it at times. Great poem sweetie!
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Beautiful.
Wow.. This poem touched me deeply. Where I go for Summer/Winter/Spring vacation, theres a beach where I like to sit and think. Just last vacation, I felt quite like this. All I kould thik of, was the guy I loved... But anyway, I digress. This is a really pretty poem. Deserves applause.
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lovely writing
Man is the only animal that contemplates death, and also the only animal that shows any sign of doubt of its finality.
This is a beautiful poem, heartfelt and flowing. I am so glad things worked out for you in the end. But I know what it is like to find you must put it into words. Lovely writing.
I wish you seashells and sandpipers and a to bring you peace.
Blessings ~ crisstiena xx
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The ultimate loneliness in surrendering to Tranquility.... Beautiful!
I love:
"a shell of a woman standing here,
the sea will take the emptiness left inside"
Very powerful and full of truth!
In the end we will all have to find that tranquility on our own, left by our Loves, or not...
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Beautiful! Yes, my heart breaks, I like the part about beckoning to my shattered heart. This is filled with hope, that yes, life goes on even after one feels all is lost. Giving up the soul, and peacefulness is felt, like the way you express yourself, great write.
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This is beautiful, really well written and powerful, your words melt on the page, nice flow! Great job, I love what you have done here! Congrats!
Purplerose
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sandygram,
What an unexplainable thing to go through, let alone have to suffer through. And hardest of all is to write it down. I'm glad the ocean's constant beckoning grew faint. Your words have described the feelings of lonliness as the ocean was seen as your only friend at the time. I admire your strength to speak your emotions on paper or computer screen. I found your poem to be very hopeful and passionate. Thanks for sharing!
Madame Mystery
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A very pretty piece, very well written, I loved the imagery here, it really worked well The picture also seemed to go well with the piece
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a very sad poem that so fortunately ended in happiness. I often wonder if those that are contemplating suicide just have momentary tunnel vision and therefore do not even think that they might heal from the pain and go on and find joy again....I am familiar with suicide (but not the thoughts that precede it) as my dad chose that way out. He was a tortured soul his entire life though , and it was not one single event that led him to decide to leave this world. I do hope he is at peace now
Reenie
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well i agree with angel but in a different sense... i think that writing can get rid of the sadness inside because letting others help you thought it can mean that you have another reason to live another day.. glad you found god and all that 2.. not my cup of tea i must say but at least you have something to live by keep on keeping on and writing beautiful poetry
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God Bless Sandygram A Lot
Well, this is good testimony to stick around and allow things to get better for things have a way of working out and God helps thee who helps thyself. Godspeed and Best Wishes 24/7
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Sometimes in writing out our sorrows we find enough of the peace we long for to make it just a little closer to the happiness God has planned for us. Beautiful write. Patti
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oh Sandy, iam so sorry you had to ever feel such lonliness and sorrow...it is so difficult to hold on when we think we have nothing left to hold on for...you are a stronger person now, a wonderul poet too! this poem is so sad, i hope you never ever feel like giving up again. God bless, rebeka
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blessed be... a beautiful poem! sometimes we all think of death as bringing us tranquility or at least escape from pain. i thank God i too got past that. as i read your poem i remembered those times.
very emotional piece. it's good to share
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