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I know you're there




I can’t feel your presence yet

But I know you’re there

I feel you in my heart

Touch you with the blood we share


I haven’t told a soul

They would never comprehend

The love I have for you

The devotion that transcends


I hold on tenaciously

As I await the time

When I’ll wrap you in my arms

With a reverence sublime


Too soon I’ll have to share

You with the world outside

But for now you are my secret

Together - alone we bide


Impatiently I wait

Longing for a telltale sign

That you will not abandon me

For places more divine


In euphoric throes I linger

Praying God won’t take you back

Before your countenance I’ve touched

Oh how I’d suffer from your lack


As the days elapse I’m thankful

That you’re still here with me

But too soon - as our love grows

Your thriving presence all will see.



Patricia Gibson-Williams

 

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Written October 20th, 2004

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  • Artemis Gem
    October 23, 2004
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    Thats good!
    I love how you worded it!


  • bulletimperio
    October 23, 2004
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    Ohhh...that was lovely!!! You touched me so deeply. You did a very good job, the thoughts, the words...it counts a lot to create such a wonderful piece, I'd say...way to go and I wish you goodluck!


  • Sara Bellem
    October 22, 2004
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    Wow, This is really beautiful! I wanted to read a poem or short story first before entering this contest and I am so glad I did! I wish you the best of luck in this contest, Ihope win a trophy, You truly deserve one Great Job! I hope to read more from you in the future, the way you write and have expressed this is simply beautiful, take care ---Sara


  • pulsating
    October 22, 2004
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    I've said this
    before but there
    is just something
    about the way
    your poems end
    that leave a chilling
    feeling inside of me,
    I really get goosebumps,

    amazing work hun...

    take care,

    olivia

  • Porcelain
    October 22, 2004
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    This is beautiful.... one of my favourite entries in the contest so far, if not my favourite. I've always been touched by the devotion most women have for their unborn children... it's perhaps the only thing that would make me want to have a child. There's something so poignant about being that close to someone in blood and in flesh that you captured here in a way that even I, never having carried a child, can understand. Beautiful work. Congratulations for writing it and good luck (that you don't need) in the contest.


  • October 22, 2004
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    It's very sweet.

    Much respect,
    Sarah


  • Musical Anomaly
    October 22, 2004
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    Awww! That's so sweet! I could tell what the poem was about before reading boogp04's comment, yet you didn't need to tell me. It was figurative but not obscure. It's beautiful! Glad you got the chance to enter.

  • ktd225
    October 22, 2004
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    this is a great piece. Today of all days, it really hit me, so thank you for that. nice job and kep it up. I look foward to reading more of your work.


  • boogp04
    October 22, 2004
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    ahhhh...this is beautiful, and if I understand correctly, it's about a pregnant woman? I have never been there before, but I have heard that a woman's love for her child starts before the baby is ever born....wonderfully written, great job! Good luck in the contest, I'm sure that this will win....
    Brandie

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