Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

What Grandmother said about People and Leaves

Missing image
"Before



                                    YELLOW



They're gone...



ORANGE                             



There's a grand



              RED



Finale!"

Author notes

yay, triple metaphor: leaves, people and fireworks!!! What a hoot that old lady was! Long live autumn!
Written October 22nd, 2004

In a list

A contest entry

What did you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 15 of 15

  • raggyann
    May 16, 2006
    Edit | Reply
    great


  • ToltecWarrior
    October 13, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Oh, I love this. YOu capyured the essence of autumn here. I like the metaphore of leaves and people. I used it in my poem too. it really is true.

    peace-
    Toltec Warrior


  • whispersoftly
    October 8, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    simple eloquent perfect well done xx Cheryl


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    October 8, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Your approach is brilliant, I could see the leaves fluttering down by the simplicity of it, Wonderfully done!

    Wishing you all the best in this contest Blessings, Sandi


  • Yorworstnightmare
    July 20, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    short and sweet good write!
    pita


  • April Renee
    January 21, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    short and sweet. creative. enjoyed the read. well done.

    Blu


  • Claide
    January 19, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Geesh, you're brilliant.

  • bobrocks
    December 19, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    simplicity at it's finest.


  • SomnusLupus
    December 19, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    gorgeous. perfect. awesome.

    never seen this done before. must say it has quite an impact. and i love the concrete interjections of the colors. quite like fireworks.

    - Adam


  • ShaShay
    December 4, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    I really enjoy DEEP simplicity. You did a very intersting job here. Thanks for giving us an example of less being more.
    ~~~POO~~~


  • Claide
    December 4, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    Extremely creative! Wow... clever.


  • Thunder Space
    October 25, 2004
    Edit | Reply

    Creative!

    Wow, very, very creative!!! I Loved it so very much!!! Wow, that's just... awesome. You really deserve the trophy you got. Great job, keep it up!
    ~Anna~


  • poetryality silver member
    October 24, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    I always love the abstract nature of your pen. This is very beautiful, nostalgic and surely makes me, and any reader know what time it is. You have made magic with your pen. This is lovely! Thank you so for entering.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    October 23, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    This was truly uniques and creative. I love the colorful way you presented it as well. Very nicely penned! Good luck in the contest!

  • poetryality silver member
    October 22, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    Fantastic! I think I know your grandmother! You made me know! A more in-depth comment will be rendered during the judging process. Thanks for the entry and good luck!

1 - 15 of 15