As the first snow falls gently around me,
I find myself alone in a 6-foot hole.
Sitting down wondering why I'm here,
While trying to stay warm; my only goal.
Carefully dug by an unknown man,
Amongst many tall, mighty trees.
I've just come to this unknown place,
But for an eternity, here is where I'll be.
Soft music plays from up above,
Mixed with silent whispers and falling tears.
Looking up I recognize the faces
Of people I've known throughout my years.
Don't cry for me, but remember me.
Remember all the fun we used to have.
It's better to laugh and reminisce
Than it is to cry and just feel sad.
I am now peaceful in the falling snow.
Hearing all my loved ones silently pray.
Don't worry, there's much more fun to be had.
We'll all be together again, someday.
Author notes
I thought of the first 2 lines at work (in a hole for a basement.. imagine that. Hehe.) and all the other stuff I just wrote one line at a time 
I'm not too happy with it completely, but, hey. I was in a hurry to get to bed. Maybe I'll edit it later, but, I doubt it 
Written October 20th, 2004
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Thank you very much
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Now this is a great poem. When you refer to the hole you're in being dug by an unknown man, I love that line for some reason. You are really talented, keep it up.
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Thanks for the comments I dunno what it is with me and writing with so little to work with other than a few lines. I guess I'm too determined to get one done if I have a little something in my head.
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I, too, am supremely jealous of your talent. I am jealous that you can think of two lines and then write a piece of work like this. I get two lines, and then I am done. Sometimes only one line! I am going to share this with Dahmon, maybe he'll like it...
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Wow... I know it supposed to give some hope, but at the same time it makes me sad to think that someone I love is somehow awake at the bottom of a grave. Maybe it just makes me think of people who were burried alive lol. ANYWAYS.. I really did love it... wonderfully written. I loved the ending.
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wow. seriously, all i can say is wow. it's amazingly good and i'm supremely jealous at your talent. another great one, kyle.
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Hehe. Yup, that's pretty much exactly what I do. Except for my first few poems, that's what I always do is think of a few lines and go with 'em. Thanks for the comment(s)
-Kyle
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great for a quick write, wow!
you always think of a few lines and let it flow from there, huh? how cool! anyway, yeah, i like it...it's kind of sad, somber, but you know- some poems have to be that way. this is another good one!
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Wow! this is really good! i love your use of words too! great write
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