How do you know
if your love is true
does he really mean it
or is he just playing you?
you cry each night
just wondering
does he really love you
just because he gave you a ring?
if you believe
all the things that he has said
next thing you know
you'll be in his bed
losin a part of you
to some boy
when you know you'll end up with pain
instead of joy
a couple moments of pleasure
for a lifetime of hell?
you know its not somthing
you can send back in the mail
if your'e afraid to say no
and stand up to this boy
to refuse to be treated
like some lousy toy
if your'e afraid you may lose him
and in the process you'll lose it
but now you'll get an Sexually Transmitted Disiese
and even become pregnent
you find out he's playin ya
just like a Nentindo
you know the baby is his
now were do you turn to
you scream in his face
and throw somthing hard at him
you turn in disgust
all of the lights turn dim
all of this can been avoided
if you do just one thing
don't fall for a playa
who gives you a ring
Author notes
Written October 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- Your Guy/Girl/Significant Other- In Four Parts by wbiro.
550 points, ended January 10, 2005, 6 entries
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that was a really good poem! i really think that i could relate to that very well. your flow was amazing in this poem! great work!
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good poem, you have part 1 and part 2 there- he's toying with you, and you're going to dump him (and keep his ring)! So add parts 3- there's something he doesn't want (or is too embarrassed for) you to see, and 4- what you do next, understand him better, forgive him, laugh harder at him... and you'll have it...
STD- it would look better just spelled out- sexually transmitted disease! More powerful. -
no my poem doesnt mean love isnt ever real, i was trying to convey a message to all women that you should be careful, and that boys can be tricky. i was just trying to say stand up for yourself and don't let a guy run all over you. maybe you didnt like my poem, but that's okay, i mean im not a nun...
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Eh.
In the fifth stanza, "beleive" should be "believe." This poem left a lot of things hanging for me, and I didn't really find myself interested toward the end. It also seems to be putting down love in general, as if every single person has no interest beyond sex. A good poem for a nun, I guess. -
what does this mean?? did y'all break up or somethin??
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actually im 100 lbs now, i need to change that, but i swear, i just got taller, lol
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thank you very much and no im not like pregnent or anything, but me and aaron are going through some hard times and he's being a jerk...so ya that's how i feel...ive decided to abide by the rule:
middle schoolers are good...
dating is good...
middle schoolers dating is NOT good!!!
anyways, im glad youve started talking to me again, i enjoy your company! ttyl
~Jessica~ -
Heavy
Wow what a wonderful poem.. I can kinda relate when I was 19 I thought I loved this guy and moved in with him and I got pregant and then this man turned into a beast and beat me until I lost the child. So I understand the hurt and the mis trust you can have in a man. Just keep writing you have such a great Talent.
Always,
Jennifer -
good peice. Most girls should learn this lesson. Nice write keep writing
Robin -
I haven't lost my verginity yet, so I guess I took your advice. Anyways great poem keep up the good work. I love penguins too.
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I really like this poem!... I know how you feel... and if someone doesn't... then they are probly full of poo... but anyways... i like penguins to... lol... sry, had to say that. Keep writing!!!... TOTALY AWESOME!!!!!
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I really enjoyed reading this...It conveys a message that throughout school was forced down our throats but in a way that makes it easier to take...great work, and I love your sad contest idea, so I just had to enter 3, hope it's OK!
Brandie -
Well said, Baby, very well said. I found only one editing issue: "a STD" would read better as "an STD." Otherwise, this piece reflects a great deal of talent and, as all talent must do, editing and re-editing is a must.
This conveys a truthful message the whole world needs to heed. You might enjoy "Smart Mouth," posted here at A/P and which was inspired by a conversation I had with my daughter back when she was 13yo. She's 41 today.
Never stop writing; for it is in your blood. Without it, you would surely die.
Love and hugs
BonnieQ
Associate Editor, WA
Waltsan Publishing, TX
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I enjoyed reading that. I wish more girls/women would realize that a ring isn't everything. There has to be love. Great job. Do you really only way 96 lbs.? That's crazy wow!
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Your poem leaves the reader with something to ponder.We must follow our own instincts. Learn to make good decions based on knowledge we have learned from others. Talk to friends and strangers to get opinions. Then listion to what you want for yourself only. It's your body. Boys will come in and out of your life and I know right now you don't think so. But from a 32 year old, they do.......
You will look back one day and think about it and be greatful you made it through all that. You seem mature for your age Good luck with your desision and if you need someone to talk I'm a shout away, Texas not that big a state....lol. God bless you
Rose
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So true... so so true. It's really hard to stand up to guys like that. They do all they can to lure you into bed. SCUMBAGS!!!! Grr. There's a saying that I was tought in my teenage years... "Girls play at sex to get love, boys play at love to get sex". I really hope that society changes and the boys show themselves as men worthy or our attention and affection!
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didnt quite understand the author's comments, but at least i understood the poem! I recently went to this christian conference called SONG OF SOLOMON. It was all about relationships and love and stuff the way the Bible tells us we should do it. the kool thing was that it was specifically for our age group. It was really funny too. Anywayz i've decided to lay off on the whole boyfriend/girlfriend thing until i'm ready. i'll have to admit thought it is kinda hard........But i can wait. well ttyl. nice write
-Ur Bro in Christ
Jonathon
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