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Sundays

A crisp cool autumn day
Leaves falling
Wool coats and holding hands

Walking together in a park
Children playing
Snuggling close together

Sharing thoughts and ideas
Whispering secrets
A private world you two share

Beautiful day, good coffee
Great conversation  
That is what Sundays were made for

Author notes

I just needed to see this away from my word program.  I am still working on it.  These are just scattered thoughts that will hopefull evolve into something.
Written October 17th, 2004

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  • A Vampires Lament
    January 30, 2005
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    Heyness. Thank you sooo much for the comment on my poem. That is very true (about people not really getting what was intended out of the poem). But yeah...this poem is relaxing. It made me think of my boyfriend . Yes yes, must applaud!

    -Angela


  • Rubee
    January 25, 2005
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    Well for scattered thoughts, they're wonderfuly put together!! This is how sundays..or other days as well..should be spent, with a special someone, holding hands, strolling in the park.. what a lovely picture that paints!!!! A most delightful read Anna...beautifully done!!


  • L. David Stuart
    January 21, 2005
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    great

    Sundays are made for Football-oh yeah, and the NBA-and kids. Liked it alot....

  • ack1013
    December 13, 2004
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    I completely share your sentiment here. This is EXACTLY what sundays should be like. It also helps that my favorite season is fall... Have you heard the song, "When its raining on sunday,"? It has similar sentiments... Sunday should be about relaxing with those we love.


  • Candice Bezanson
    October 28, 2004
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    its cool, Thanks for the thought though


  • Candice Bezanson
    October 28, 2004
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    Oh this was so sweet.The vision of two people just sharing their lives together is so preciouse. I liked this a lot. great write.


  • Manicmuze
    October 22, 2004
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    Something about this reminds me of my "breakfast" poem series... lol I love lazy sunday's, taking it easy, not having any place to be or anything i have to do.

    This is nicely done, enjoyed it!
    ~ Wendy

  • Just4u
    October 20, 2004
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    I thought everyday was made for that...

    Eddy


  • Ashley Mosely
    October 18, 2004
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    this is great i love winter-what you wrote reminds me of everything i miss when the summer starts to show its colors. great write!


  • BeautifulContradiction
    October 18, 2004
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    I like it the way it is.
    Its simple, and hints at so much, which can be (and is in this case) very lovely.
    It was so sweet.

    I would suggest changing 'holding' to 'held' in the first stanza.

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